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Green things (Free verse) by ecargo
In the end, we played at speech,
words tumbling like the sea,
foretelling storms and heaven
cracked open.
Some things we cannot make
as new, we cannot mend.
The older gods are dead--
none left to patch the chasms,
or stop the sun along its downward slide;
none to straddle worlds or shoulder skies.
We have no incantations, no offerings
against decline. We break us like ice;
this chilly, jagged silence is our mortal end.
New-fledged, Iâll rise to fly
the shattered circle, find a new way,
deep and wide, leaving you to build alone.
You nest in leaves and break twigs for shelter.
You shut out the sky with green things.
You shut out the sky.
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Arithmetic Mean: 9.428572
Weighted score: 6.191026
Overall Rank: 997
Posted: January 13, 2006 9:36 PM PST; Last modified: January 15, 2006 10:07 PM PST
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Better than the first.
This has been kicking around in one form or another for ages, and I've never gotten it to a point that I liked. Probably past time to lay it to rest.