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rainday (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
Wringing cloudbells pealing braingray, we huddle, buttoned, beneath bloombrellas, ruddy handles slick and slippering, grinning through this grainy rainday. galoshed legs galloping muddy puddles, bulletdrops battering scrunched tissue lilies, gasping nightcrawlies subtly crushed, survivalling on 'til scraped by morning's brush.


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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.6723537
Overall Rank: 1992
Posted: July 15, 2003 4:33 PM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2003 8:32 PM PDT
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[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Jul-03/7:10 PM | Reply
A dandy.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 16-Jul-03/11:10 AM | Reply
Thankye olde crone!
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.170.137 | 15-Jul-03/7:47 PM | Reply
I liked this poem, cept "survivalling".. its just strange.. 9
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > SupremeDreamer | 16-Jul-03/9:39 AM | Reply
Stranger than "cloudbells" or "galoshed"? :)
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.179.239 > Bill Z Bub | 16-Jul-03/10:39 PM | Reply
those ones i understand... they make me moan... then survivalling made me go limp right before i came.. so.. it just didnt turn me on.. ;P
[8] <~> @ 64.252.187.184 | 15-Jul-03/8:41 PM | Reply
i want more bounce in this nonsensey-like rhymer!
(oh, i am such a whiner!)
good star, but take it all the way, BZB.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > <~> | 16-Jul-03/9:55 AM | Reply
Dammit you are hard to please woman! :\

[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > Bill Z Bub | 16-Jul-03/10:42 AM | Reply
but, so worth the effort.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > <~> | 16-Jul-03/11:09 AM | Reply
Yes, it's the key to the gates of paradise.
[8] <~> @ 64.252.22.163 | 16-Jul-03/8:43 PM | Reply
galumphingly good.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > <~> | 20-Jul-03/9:48 PM | Reply
thank you!
[9] EAger to Offend @ 204.225.154.253 | 17-Jul-03/7:49 AM | Reply
Survivalling on is nice. No, it's right. I'd not edit this anymore as it seems to be sensibly nonsensicle. 9
[8] richa @ 81.86.78.85 | 17-Jul-03/10:26 AM | Reply
I quite like all the daft words you use. It could almost be a nonsense poem or a surreal poem. Bloombrellas is my favourite
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > richa | 18-Jul-03/10:52 AM | Reply
Thanks richa. Bloombrellas is my favorite too.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 68.152.92.3 | 17-Jul-03/2:18 PM | Reply
More fun than humans should be allowed to have. Miss you guys and gals like the dickens. Who invented that line anyway? Big numbers!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > INTRANSIT | 18-Jul-03/10:51 AM | Reply
Yes, big numbers.
So where the hell are you now?
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