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Acoustic

by zzinnia66

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Jul 2003 · 11 comments

He tasted like copper his music, like blood. I gave him the spark but uncoiled his wind and left him onstage, blue and blind.

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[8] richa 14-Jul-03/11:27 AM Reply
I like these little packaged thoughts. It is probably easier to make a whole out of such a small verse. But nevertheless you have done it perfectly
[7] nentwined 14-Jul-03/1:49 PM Reply
blue?

very pretty. but once more I show my ignorance--I don't get it.
[n/a] zzinnia66 › nentwined 14-Jul-03/2:01 PM Reply
there are many blues-the music kind (blind willie, etc.), the sad kind, the balls kind, the stage light kind.

the coil/wind thing is about about a Gibson P-90 (pickup, for and amp: http://www.harmony-central.com/Guitar/Data2/Gibson/P-90-01.html)

so, once again, it's about love being the power behind music. or something. i get sort of abstrusely technical at times.
[7] nentwined › zzinnia66 14-Jul-03/2:03 PM Reply
:heh: I see. Yes, yes you do. :)
[7] Rodavlas 14-Jul-03/2:34 PM Reply
MORE!
[8] Christof 15-Jul-03/6:13 AM Reply
Guitar technicalities made poetry - I like it. Perfectly condensed.
[7] EAger to Offend 15-Jul-03/2:10 PM Reply
Music, technology, and the technology of music...what more could one want but, the feelings you conjure. P-90 eh? cool axe.
[9] scitz 15-Jul-03/3:55 PM Reply
Its like the fabulous baker boys Z style ! pffeifered up to the max.

now light that cute cigar, pull up that pale denier and show some thigh.

Very suave, sultry liked the rasp.9

welcome back -you bang
[10] Bachus 15-Jul-03/5:07 PM Reply
Brilliant
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 15-Jul-03/5:38 PM Reply
OH, "wInd"! Not "wind". Now it makes sense!
[n/a] <~> › Bill Z Bub 15-Jul-03/8:51 PM Reply
like, "whined", not like, breathe, or blow..