Re: Laundry Day by impert&ent	26-Aug-03/7:32 AM
suggestion for opening revision: Find the difference between a bedsheet and a phone call. Both hang off a line Both, means for entangling ourselves In every desire.
Re: blink by VorioBuche	25-Aug-03/10:09 PM
nice.
Re: My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos	25-Aug-03/7:27 PM
nadine will know where they are. or at least where the other set is. good luck, jeremi. not that you'll need it. wish i could be there. but i have an ex husband to meet, and a condo to sell. ah, life. will it be taped?
Re: Halves by impert&ent	25-Aug-03/7:12 PM
halves severs it. but maybe you meant to? other than that, no beef from me.
Re: To be discontinued by impert&ent	25-Aug-03/7:09 PM
no. i don't buy it.
Re: Laundry Day by impert&ent	25-Aug-03/7:08 PM
superb. thank you.
Re: a comment on Addiction leaving by death by LuckyJoe	25-Aug-03/6:09 PM
but joe, can't you see that when you say, "Guess my main part with writing is I want to give a message, so I write one given way to make the person see what it is that I want to say"what you are saying is that YOU ARE WRITING FOR OTHERS. let them walk alongside you. feel the cold. the rain. the sun. the breeze. that's got to work so much better than telling them how it is. see?
Re: the space between by impert&ent	25-Aug-03/5:54 PM
extremely satisfying. in a chop wood, carry water kind of way.
Re: let's pretend that we can write! by val	25-Aug-03/5:52 PM
so, wait, let me get this straight--you buy into the whole who's who bullshit, and you criticize the ranker? the most advanced forum for literary comeraderie in the civilzed world??? HOW DARE YOU!! BANISHED!!!
Re: a comment on Addiction leaving by death by LuckyJoe	25-Aug-03/5:29 PM
okay, well, tell me some of the somethings you did to get by. in detail. make it real. did you steal from your mom? blow strangers? because this is boiled down. and sanitized. it hints at big bad things. you know, the way parents do when they tell you not to do something, and your first thought was, bull-shit. specifics make a poem, joe. if you're sleeping in your car for a while (that way they can't FIND your car), without a permanent address, and you're buying catfood instead of paying back your grandfather... you see what i am saying? make me believe you lived it. this is more like crystal lane swift's pablum than anything real. god bless the girl for her innocence, and for her faith, but she cannot write a poem to save her life. she's too sugar-coated. maybe i'm too jaded? i don't think so. show me someone who has not suffered. okay, maybe -=Dark_Angel=- hasn't. he's got it all.
Re: Addiction leaving by death by LuckyJoe	25-Aug-03/1:10 PM
joe. if you have been there, you should write about what happened. because this looks like bob dole wrote it. you should subtitle this 'refer madness : the reprise' or 'drugs are bad, mmkay?' no truth to it, and therefor, no vote.
Re: a comment on quarter-step (abridged) by richa	24-Aug-03/7:33 PM
i know you prefer a march. but, why???
Re: fragile by Bill Z Bub	22-Aug-03/10:54 PM
:) have a 9.
Re: One Sided Love by Caducus	22-Aug-03/2:41 PM
nicely done, sir
Re: Aphrodite (edited) by Caducus	22-Aug-03/11:54 AM
cad--nice first try. but. why. do. you. insist. on. writing. with. a. different. voice. than. the. one. you. speak. with., just. because. it's. a. sonnet??? see how fucking annoying that is? don't try to be so noble. tell me about her breats, and how they mounded up, wet and lustrous, like pearls. tell me about the tangle of arame that dresses her..erm, 'cavern'... tell me about the sand in your crotch. that's what i want to hear.
Re: D.I.Y.M Syndrome by Rilke4ClosetLesbians	22-Aug-03/11:03 AM
or should i say :o
Re: D.I.Y.M Syndrome by Rilke4ClosetLesbians	22-Aug-03/11:03 AM
:)
Re: The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz	22-Aug-03/11:01 AM
nice. love the countdown.
Re: a comment on Undertow by eliastemplar	22-Aug-03/10:50 AM
technically it is. virtually it is. actually it is. and if you thought for a second about it, you'd agree it's powerful. knowing you're in the service, eliastemplar, this poem evokes service on a submarine. i know how long those guys/women are gone for, and the blackness between news. nice job, sir.
Re: a comment on faulty fate by Nirvana13666	22-Aug-03/10:48 AM
not everyone can paint, but every one can see, girlie. take ourself down a peg, wouldja?