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quarter-step (abridged) (Free verse) by richa the missing
quarter-step makes the waltz.
what want
would make it a march?
Just us.
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Portsmouth belle 2
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The Sidekick and The Distant Damsel
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Posted: August 21, 2003 4:58 AM PDT; Last modified: August 21, 2003 9:39 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.7777777 Overall Rank: 424 Comments:
You are old, but hey, I'd fuck you.
I am a few years younger than you my friend
All the better reason to fuck.
This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
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over all the poems vague, it doesnt make much sense to me. I think you need to cook this slightly longer. I'll give my vote later.
the answer being a selfish want. Rock garden and resevoir are man made, nature harnessed for mans selfish needs.
That is why the wind slant on the rocks is out of kilter.
In their natural environment the rocks slant would be consistent and indicate where the weathering (like eroding) elements came from.
Hope this makes it easier to understand.
Should consider ironing out the wrinkles though, or seeing how you could get your message across in a more clear fashion, but thats up to you.
Blessed with 8.
more than selfishness, here. personal taste in music, aesthetism, and utility explain these creations. and the question asked here, rhetorically, is will you dine with me.
i misunderstand how any of these things can be selfish, richard.
unless you mean to say that we have no right to shape anything.
we are animals richard; survival and prosperity are different than self-gratification.
please explain what you meant, again. i'm feeling particularly dense this morning.
and i know what it feels like to think i am being clear in my writing, only to see, later, that i was too far inside the idea to communicate it effectively.
i just like calling YOU out, dreamer.
I'll bite: it was just a defence of something for somethings sake. Kind of like part of a finished plan (every hair is numbered etc).
beautiful is not useful, that kind of thing
but can you give me a hint as to why you would prefer a march to a waltz?? perhaps, in the title? is it a parting of way?
The first line is saying waltz is a march missing something.
And therefore must be fixed.
the poem is about skewed logic of us, our vision of the world.