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Undertow (Haiku) by eliastemplar turn off all the lights
beneath the cold that covers
your only summer
Up the ladder:
Panacea
Down the ladder:
These are not just words
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Posted: August 8, 2003 10:14 AM PDT; Last modified: August 21, 2003 10:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1589375 Overall Rank: 5104 Comments:
MMMMMMM. Yep maybe 'last' summer?
Whenever I catch a cold, this big black snot falls out of my left nostril and curls in my lap like a muskrat would if it tried.
When some mother birds sense danger to their chicks they'll pretend they broke their wing and flap around to distract the predator.
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and if you thought for a second about it, you'd agree it's powerful.
knowing you're in the service, eliastemplar, this poem evokes service on a submarine. i know how long those guys/women are gone for, and the blackness between news.
nice job, sir.