Re: yellow verse by daniella	12-Mar-03/11:43 AM
nifty! (add "madly" to line 2 'n' it'd scan better)
Re: just as we were by daniella	12-Mar-03/11:34 AM
mmm, yummy. This is one of the few poems I've ever read which made me wish there was a version on video.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	12-Mar-03/10:50 AM
Sawa. She's from washington, and energetic. She wrote a rhyming poem about cherry trees or something, 'n' someone posted "nonsense. Stop rhyming until you know what you're talking about" and they were quite right 'n' I posted an example (non-rhyming) poem that used an image or word from each corresponding line of hers, but that actually made sense as a whole. She sent me a bitter comment and then deleted all her poems :(
Re: first kiss by lost in america	12-Mar-03/7:49 AM
spare and sweet
Re: a comment on On coming across a field of deer one afternoon (2) by <~>	11-Mar-03/3:29 PM
mmm the comma's bug me too. But I disagree with ranger that line 4 is too long. Tumbled bramble is great, it's like physical onomatopoeia. great 8.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/3:03 PM
myself i am fast pushing forty but I'll never outgrow being horny I ain't got no tricks 'least none I admits But my lovemaking ain't ever boring
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/1:55 PM
There was a chick once named for a flower Who posted a sex pome 'bout every hour Although middle-aged She became all the rage Because everyone hoped they might plow her.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/1:44 PM
oh shit she deleted all her poems. I'm such a terrible bastard. I truly meant my comment to be helpful, I really did.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/1:19 PM
oh fuck the Unwanted gift was priceless. Especially the little embedded bit of real poetry. I was flying there right beside you, da. Wallowing in woe. Speaking of which, I just found out that someone deleted one of their poems because of a comment I made, so tonight I am wallowing in both woe AND guilt, supported by a snort of lagavulin drunk from a demitasse. speaking of issues european women are different than NA women, one said to me she had her issue and I thought she was being coy and she wasn't, it was a friendly warning in case I cared and i had to throw away an entire set of bedding and she looked at us in the mirror and doubled over giggling saying we looked like pig-killers.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/1:07 PM
du bist ganz korrect. Everything you said is true, all of it, even the question mark. Now, a caveat, naturally when I'm in serious mode I'm a staunch supporter of gay rights. I even wanted to get together with a man once, but I couldn't go through with it, for which I esteem myself a lousy coward. But I watched a friend give blow jobs for meth and it didn't affect my feelings of cameraderie with him one little bit no siree. Especially since he had just recently sent me a girl he didn't want, an incredibly gorgeous 19-year old half-asian goth with an iq of 150 who was passively wandering around California doing a kind of 19-year-old hyper-smart goth chick jack kerouac thing. You just can't beat that.
Re: a comment on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Mar-03/1:00 PM
not only have I no grasp on reality, but reality rarely bothers to grasp ME anymore. I have to grasp myself, and that makes me bored so I lash out. Anyway, I'm very used to people thinking I meant exactly the opposite of what I thought I said, so I've gotten in the habit of saying the opposite of what I mean. Of course, this leads to an escalation of meta-reversals, so I often tend to just resort to obfuscation and muttering. Further weakening my frangible hold on reality.
Re: i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america	11-Mar-03/12:02 PM
I like this poem a whack. and pooh-poohing lowercase is old, it is meta-stuffiness. Capitals get in the way sometimes, it's as simple as that. Words are meant to be twisted and poked and well-used and fucked with. Kind of like^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^Hwoah, CAREFUL
Re: a comment on The darkest woods ever by Shardik	10-Mar-03/6:08 PM
where I grew up, actually, "should of" was the proper usage. Actually, "shoulda", to be precise. "Should have" would be correct if one were, say, mulling one's choice of supper flesh: "I wonder if I should have the greasy pork, or the bloody beef. The pork looks awful tempting, but the beef is better for my heart. Damn! I shoulda never let that fool woman talk me into going to the doctor inna first place. Now alls I do is worry about my goddamn heart."
Re: dreams by babygurl420	10-Mar-03/5:49 PM
methamphetamines burn holes in your brain. I've heard.
Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik	10-Mar-03/5:43 PM
damn, a lurv pome that I like. Time for bed. 8
Re: a comment on Paranoia by lastobelus	10-Mar-03/4:33 PM
oh, everything I do is extremely derivative. ya know, I read something 'n' get all excited, and then later I puke up some derivative form of what I read. I don't aspire to be a poet, they have to work too hard, I see myself more as a Regurgitationist.
Re: a comment on Paranoia by lastobelus	10-Mar-03/4:26 PM
'cuz I'm lazy
Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	10-Mar-03/3:48 PM
I have no formal education in poetry, so could someone please illuminate me: I was under the impression the WHOLE FUCKING POINT of a limerick is to be as crass crude tasteless & politically incorrect as possible (& subsequently funny). Jesus, have they started teaching in schools that you need to look for and evaluate the social message of FUCKING LIMERICKS? yer jest spost ta laff fer chrissakes.
Re: Three Pennies of Garbage by babyBOOMER	10-Mar-03/3:33 PM
Why is every word capitalized? Is this a kind of anti-cummings curmudgeonry?
Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined	10-Mar-03/3:03 PM
a little bit "mannered" in a way that I quite like. I have, actually, no fucking idea what "mannered" means, but i've been accused of it before and it seems to refer to a quality that I see here and like. 8.