on Dance With Me by marvelis
10 Mar 2003, 2:05 PM
sorry, I couldn't even finish. kotz.
on 2 weeks and a day by Bill Z Bub
9 Mar 2003, 6:03 PM
"rough dewed welcome of time" tastes as good as the first fucking cup of coffee in the morning.
replying on The Drunkest ever by horus8
9 Mar 2003, 5:54 PM
The meter 'n' rhyme slips away as you go deeper into the drunk.
duh.
duh.
on insomnia by Bill Z Bub
9 Mar 2003, 5:48 PM
fast and good.
replying on Floating in mindless clutter of words by wLeBlancw
9 Mar 2003, 5:43 PM
The reason we feel driven to posture is an instinctive drive to impress females.
If you're going to beat your chest, do it somewhere and in such a way that it actually has a chance of catching the eye of a hapless female.
I believe is what he was saying.
If you're going to beat your chest, do it somewhere and in such a way that it actually has a chance of catching the eye of a hapless female.
I believe is what he was saying.
on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8
9 Mar 2003, 5:29 PM
nifty.
replying on this old man (edit) by Bill Z Bub
9 Mar 2003, 5:26 PM
Revise if you want, but be careful where you take revising advice from.
'couse, you could always take it from me: how 'bout "and rubs his emptied hands"
my beef is that I get the impression you want to celebrate some aspect of your old man, but you caricature (is caricature allowed to be a verb, or do I have to -ize it?) him too strongly for the celebration to have impact. If you follow what I mean.
'couse, you could always take it from me: how 'bout "and rubs his emptied hands"
my beef is that I get the impression you want to celebrate some aspect of your old man, but you caricature (is caricature allowed to be a verb, or do I have to -ize it?) him too strongly for the celebration to have impact. If you follow what I mean.
on A Best Friend by Birdman42s
9 Mar 2003, 5:18 PM
isn't sacharine supposed to come with a warning label? Oh. "A Best Friend". It did. My bad.
replying on Taller Girl by lastobelus
9 Mar 2003, 4:51 PM
all my poems fizzle. I blame it on Attention Deficit Disorder.
replying on i won't by elizabethann
9 Mar 2003, 4:09 PM
sarcastic bastard :)
on A piece i shall never play again by ==Doylum
9 Mar 2003, 3:56 PM
when I was a kid i always tried to see how far I could stick the tape in my father's tape measures out before it flopped over.
Sometimes I'd get it out 10 or 12 feet, on a good $20 tape measure. Always I'd try to ease it out farther; always it'd flop before the end of the tape.
Whenever I fucked up a $20 tape measure, I got a good licking.
Sometimes I'd get it out 10 or 12 feet, on a good $20 tape measure. Always I'd try to ease it out farther; always it'd flop before the end of the tape.
Whenever I fucked up a $20 tape measure, I got a good licking.
replying on Taller Girl by lastobelus
9 Mar 2003, 3:36 PM
yeah line 9 + 15 bug me, but I'm an amateur 'n' amateurs don't edit
dunno what you mean about the last line, please clarify!
I ain't no german. Just live there.
dunno what you mean about the last line, please clarify!
I ain't no german. Just live there.