Re: The Coming Light by poetandknowit	10-Mar-03/2:27 PM
this is familiar candy, i have a sweet tooth still but I'm working on kicking the habit.
Re: Coffle by Wulf	10-Mar-03/2:21 PM
henh? prosaic & folksy with occasional braying.
Re: Frozen by scornofangels	10-Mar-03/2:08 PM
i dunno, maybe you can sell this to Lords of Acid for a buck if you work the word pussy into it somewhere.
Re: Dance With Me by marvelis	10-Mar-03/2:05 PM
sorry, I couldn't even finish. kotz.
Re: 2 weeks and a day by Bill Z Bub	9-Mar-03/6:03 PM
"rough dewed welcome of time" tastes as good as the first fucking cup of coffee in the morning.
Re: a comment on The Drunkest ever by horus8	9-Mar-03/5:54 PM
The meter 'n' rhyme slips away as you go deeper into the drunk. duh.
Re: insomnia by Bill Z Bub	9-Mar-03/5:48 PM
fast and good.
Re: a comment on Floating in mindless clutter of words by wLeBlancw	9-Mar-03/5:43 PM
The reason we feel driven to posture is an instinctive drive to impress females. If you're going to beat your chest, do it somewhere and in such a way that it actually has a chance of catching the eye of a hapless female. I believe is what he was saying.
Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	9-Mar-03/5:29 PM
nifty.
Re: a comment on this old man (edit) by Bill Z Bub	9-Mar-03/5:26 PM
Revise if you want, but be careful where you take revising advice from. 'couse, you could always take it from me: how 'bout "and rubs his emptied hands" my beef is that I get the impression you want to celebrate some aspect of your old man, but you caricature (is caricature allowed to be a verb, or do I have to -ize it?) him too strongly for the celebration to have impact. If you follow what I mean.
Re: A Best Friend by Birdman42s	9-Mar-03/5:18 PM
isn't sacharine supposed to come with a warning label? Oh. "A Best Friend". It did. My bad.
Re: a comment on Taller Girl by lastobelus	9-Mar-03/4:51 PM
all my poems fizzle. I blame it on Attention Deficit Disorder.
Re: a comment on i won't by elizabethann	9-Mar-03/4:09 PM
sarcastic bastard :)
Re: A piece i shall never play again by ==Doylum	9-Mar-03/3:56 PM
when I was a kid i always tried to see how far I could stick the tape in my father's tape measures out before it flopped over. Sometimes I'd get it out 10 or 12 feet, on a good $20 tape measure. Always I'd try to ease it out farther; always it'd flop before the end of the tape. Whenever I fucked up a $20 tape measure, I got a good licking.
Re: Mebi by ==Doylum	9-Mar-03/3:46 PM
delightful... I love line 7, "twinkly stars arms" I think the last line could have more oomph, because I read bukowski too much and have this last-line thing
Re: a comment on Taller Girl by lastobelus	9-Mar-03/3:36 PM
yeah line 9 + 15 bug me, but I'm an amateur 'n' amateurs don't edit dunno what you mean about the last line, please clarify! I ain't no german. Just live there.