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Dance With Me (Lyric) by marvelis
The twinkle in your eye. The way that you say bye. All seem to tell me With you I want to be. In a ballroom with a diamond chandelier Your voice in the only music I want to hear. The way in which you gracefully sit. The emotions within me that you heat. As you speak, your legs you will elegantly cross; For the troubles of others you show such remorse. The way that you smile, I know I cannot be in denial. So beautiful in a red dress. The world you seem to caress. With teeth so white And hair pulled back so tight, You seem to be nothing less than a fairytale princess. That's how I used to think of you during recess. You've surpassed Cinderella and Snow White, Touch you those two I'm certain could not. All men, want to love a princess from a fairytale. You, I am sure, are the loveliest one of all to hail. About their accomplishments everyone does rave. But you are the greatest destiny one can ever have. From my chair I now do part And come to you with all my heart. My soul has given me a joyous task; One, that of only you I may ask. Dance with me. For eternity.

Down the ladder: A clearer lucidity

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.798611
Weighted score: 4.798611
Overall Rank: 11193
Posted: February 18, 2003 9:39 AM PST; Last modified: February 20, 2003 3:21 PM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Feb-03/7:05 PM | Reply
Will do.
[n/a] spank me baby yeah @ 195.92.194.18 | 21-Feb-03/10:16 AM | Reply
AN ENJOYABLE READ, ROMANTIC LIKE MY CURRY LIM
[10] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 3-Mar-03/4:06 PM | Reply
the twinkle in your bling the blang in your twang, chirpe durp boo wurp twittyboo. chandoliers falling onto my wait staff alas alas the diamonds have chiseled off their faces. i think poemranker needs some fresh poets, da. was right all has been read... but nothing haas yet been said

"From my chair I now do part
And come to you with all my heart." brilliant


[8] H0LL0WxL1F3 @ 198.81.26.167 | 4-Mar-03/1:59 PM | Reply
Very romantic. Nice useage of language. Keep writing, it's wonderful.
[0] lastobelus @ 217.226.25.123 | 10-Mar-03/2:05 PM | Reply
sorry, I couldn't even finish. kotz.
[2] JackCrawley @ 168.30.194.107 | 1-Apr-03/10:57 AM | Reply
I'm sorry, this is painfully bad.
[9] trina_marie_73 @ 202.128.11.12 | 3-Apr-03/6:55 AM | Reply
nice but you could work a lil more on the ending but hey thats just my opinion :)

"Trina"
[7] Lord Ganus @ 68.14.26.239 | 10-Apr-03/11:10 PM | Reply
Shove lightbulbs up your ass
And then punch yourself in the abdoment
For eternity.
[6] Mutant_X @ 212.138.47.27 | 11-Apr-03/4:58 PM | Reply
this is one nice romantic poem and by the way you don't need to concentrate much on the rhyming of the poem,many of good poems don't rhyme,modern poetry doens't stand on rhyming so just feel like fre to write don't limit yourself with a usuage of words. i give this 6,pretty good work
[5] blurryphotograph @ 24.163.40.238 | 16-Apr-03/2:37 PM | Reply
i hate rhyming..but this was actually cool..
Actually, the last two lines were cool..

i'll widen my vocabulary, and give you a 5.
[4] bondjedi @ 12.228.21.93 | 20-Apr-03/12:20 PM | Reply
I am not fond of peotry about one's mother. I give you a 4.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 8-May-03/2:22 PM | Reply
dance with yourselve.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 8-May-03/2:29 PM | Reply
On your face I now do fart.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 8-May-03/4:05 PM | Reply
Fart do I now face your on? Yes, you're on fart face.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > horus8 | 8-May-03/4:14 PM | Reply
I'm always on, fuck-knuckles.
[3] Poetsettle @ 68.158.170.115 | 18-May-03/10:06 AM | Reply
Lovely sentiment
[4] PoeTech @ 209.122.235.155 | 20-Jun-03/12:15 PM | Reply
Be sure to read my latest poem - Theology - It's amazing!!
[4] PoeTech @ 209.122.235.155 | 20-Jun-03/12:16 PM | Reply
Be sure to read my latest poem - Theology - It's amazing!!
[2] QUENDO @ 195.157.153.253 | 1-Jul-03/9:51 AM | Reply
Fuck
[n/a] Brittanyy @ 64.12.96.237 | 5-Jul-03/8:04 PM | Reply
Some of it just...Ahh forget it..Its OK...
[5] MrsGretchen @ 12.220.225.71 | 7-Jul-03/12:40 PM | Reply
Sweet, rustic
[6] DJCARTER @ 80.205.204.107 | 23-Jul-03/7:29 PM | Reply
good idea, just look and revise, and consider some different wording
[7] justjay @ 138.89.33.42 | 5-Aug-03/9:22 PM | Reply
i think ur trying to hard with your rhyming. most lyrics don't rhyme. You got to just let it flow instead of pushing to make things fit. overall i give it a 7
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 18-Aug-03/12:44 PM | Reply
How can someone gracefully sit, unless there was a turnip there?
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 19-Aug-03/10:56 PM | Reply
I believe you have to elaborate on "the way that you say goodbye". This is where I stopped; I could not quit thinking of that way as when you see a crawling creature and then feel a crawling creature.
[6] Settle @ 67.75.22.253 | 20-Aug-03/5:53 AM | Reply
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO6
[4] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 | 20-Aug-03/11:52 AM | Reply
too cliche' for me.
[1] Rilke4ClosetLesbians @ 67.121.76.54 | 26-Aug-03/3:58 PM | Reply
Yeah, there's some pretty interesting fairy tale porn stars they might want to marry.
No man dreams of a snotty princess bitch who orders them around, Jesus!
[9] William Delacroix @ 154.5.40.141 | 2-Sep-03/6:19 AM | Reply
It rhymes, it rhymes hard, but it's a lyric poem so let's not hold that against it. Pretty ending. 9/10.
PS: In your bio there's a verb missing an e.
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