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Dance With Me (Lyric) by marvelis

The twinkle in your eye. The way that you say bye. All seem to tell me With you I want to be. In a ballroom with a diamond chandelier Your voice in the only music I want to hear. The way in which you gracefully sit. The emotions within me that you heat. As you speak, your legs you will elegantly cross; For the troubles of others you show such remorse. The way that you smile, I know I cannot be in denial. So beautiful in a red dress. The world you seem to caress. With teeth so white And hair pulled back so tight, You seem to be nothing less than a fairytale princess. That's how I used to think of you during recess. You've surpassed Cinderella and Snow White, Touch you those two I'm certain could not. All men, want to love a princess from a fairytale. You, I am sure, are the loveliest one of all to hail. About their accomplishments everyone does rave. But you are the greatest destiny one can ever have. From my chair I now do part And come to you with all my heart. My soul has given me a joyous task; One, that of only you I may ask. Dance with me. For eternity.

Mutant_X 11-Apr-03/4:58 PM
this is one nice romantic poem and by the way you don't need to concentrate much on the rhyming of the poem,many of good poems don't rhyme,modern poetry doens't stand on rhyming so just feel like fre to write don't limit yourself with a usuage of words. i give this 6,pretty good work




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