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2 weeks and a day (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
work in the wee early mornings work by the light of inertia and hum work under owner's tactical warnings work on your poetry while playing dumb work for the scratch that compells like an itch work out new issues with an old bitch work when your eyelids are bruised by the sun work has become another rerun work for the good of absolute corporation work over the static of the radio station work is a culture of petty accusation work is acceptance of automatic damnation work is a vulture, an arrogant foul work by the scruff work by the scowl then PLAY in the rough dewed welcome of time or maybe just sleep and dream a life of crime

Down the ladder: Our Sweet Lady Lispalot

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.4706473
Overall Rank: 2797
Posted: January 21, 2003 11:00 AM PST; Last modified: January 21, 2003 1:53 PM PST
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[7] god'swife @ 209.178.178.233 | 21-Jan-03/2:59 PM | Reply
Last stanza first sentence, Jesus this is what i live for. "Roughed dewed" What the fuck does it mean I can't say, but my heart is in love with it. A good draft.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > god'swife | 21-Jan-03/4:49 PM | Reply
heh heh. I sure seem to like the word "rough". I use it in half my friggin' poems. Thanks for the enheartenment. I shall press on with this one...
[8] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.72 | 21-Jan-03/4:31 PM | Reply
don't be afraid of pattern on this, it works.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > INTRANSIT | 21-Jan-03/4:51 PM | Reply
Thanks for taking the time to comment. I love getting any kind of feedback, and you always give me something. I should comment more on others work.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 21-Jan-03/5:21 PM | Reply
GoldenQTip. 10.
[9] Imperfections @ 152.163.188.72 | 21-Jan-03/10:02 PM | Reply
No frills, striaght-forward, "rough," if you will. I couldn't pull it off, however you did it amazingly.
[8] lastobelus @ 217.226.19.245 | 9-Mar-03/6:03 PM | Reply
"rough dewed welcome of time" tastes as good as the first fucking cup of coffee in the morning.

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