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Burst! (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
When the moon Pierces the darkeness and Cascades down the valley Ripping trees Shoving rocks Flushing foliage Washing into the River Swelling the Current Raking sand Gouging soil Drowning the mouth Pressuring the reservoir Churning moss Agitating fish into frenzy Boiling the surface into multiple Tsunamis Fissuring the dam overcharging the turbines and Engulfing the oxygenation.... DISCHARGE THE WALLS! And flow forth unto yourself.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.4706473
Overall Rank: 2837
Posted: May 19, 2003 6:45 PM PDT; Last modified: May 19, 2003 6:45 PM PDT
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[8] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 19-May-03/7:23 PM | Reply
There's certainly a sense of power here, but I don't get the last three lines.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.14 > Bill Z Bub | 19-May-03/7:26 PM | Reply
love to tellya but I don wanna give it away. Ironically, Red hot chili peppers are on......
[8] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > INTRANSIT | 19-May-03/7:31 PM | Reply
Oh, wait, I read it again. I think I got it.
"do a little dance andthendrink a little wata"
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.14 > Bill Z Bub | 19-May-03/7:38 PM | Reply
or get hammered on wine and do a little 'rankin! Yaaaaaaa.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > INTRANSIT | 19-May-03/7:50 PM | Reply
Yes! Wait... don't tell my sponsor. Sounds like you had to pee on a frozen snowdrift off of the turnpike.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.14 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 19-May-03/8:12 PM | Reply
Hey, when ya gotta go......
[8] Mona Lisa @ 195.92.168.167 | 20-May-03/11:20 AM | Reply
Beautifully enticing in its description, you have me wowed.8
[8] deleted user @ 63.237.171.111 | 20-May-03/12:34 PM | Reply
You have a way of moving people to wherever you write about.
[8] Mr Pig @ 195.92.168.170 | 20-May-03/12:47 PM | Reply
Bloody marvellous but the term Tsunami is over baking the Spotted Dick im my humble opinion. As ever though your work is an asset to this site. May I offer you an 8 I/T, would that be okay?
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139 > Mr Pig | 20-May-03/3:38 PM | Reply
Hunky-dory. wave: too small. Tsunami: too big. Hmmmmm.
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