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Burst! (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

When the moon Pierces the darkeness and Cascades down the valley Ripping trees Shoving rocks Flushing foliage Washing into the River Swelling the Current Raking sand Gouging soil Drowning the mouth Pressuring the reservoir Churning moss Agitating fish into frenzy Boiling the surface into multiple Tsunamis Fissuring the dam overcharging the turbines and Engulfing the oxygenation.... DISCHARGE THE WALLS! And flow forth unto yourself.

Mr Pig 20-May-03/12:47 PM
Bloody marvellous but the term Tsunami is over baking the Spotted Dick im my humble opinion. As ever though your work is an asset to this site. May I offer you an 8 I/T, would that be okay?




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