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Sonnet № 37660

The darkest woods ever

by Shardik

Member since 2003 · Posted 22 Jan 2003 · Edited 26 Feb 2003 · 16 comments

They were the darkest woods ever At least that I had ever seen Trees with leaves almost of leather Animals, that struck me as too lean. So I quickened up my rigid stride While my eyes scanned for some light If I had a horse, full speed I'd ride If my lungs were not so tight. I never should have dared to trespass God damn shortcuts are always wrong Where is my boyscout with his compass? Why is this taking so awfully long!? Wait... Is that a light I see up ahead? No... Just the moon climbing higher instead.

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[6] wOrnella Mutiw 23-Jan-03/12:15 AM Reply
the situation you describe is funny, but the sonnet is not working for me. What's darkest ever? Trees with leafs of leather?...odd, the image doesn't work.....6
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Jan-03/12:35 PM Reply
Once I went for a walk in the woods and trod in some dog poo.
[10] horus8 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Feb-03/10:46 AM Reply
Once i went for a walk in the woods and learned how to make mail bombs, and anthrax. I ate dogshit while i was there. Raw. Naw, just kidding, but my mother once left me for a night alone at a camp site in Kauai. i was molested by a poltergeist. i liked it. it changed me though forever now i have the dark streal, and not in my pants.
[7] Bill Z Bub 23-Jan-03/1:57 PM Reply
I like the leaves of leather, but it should be SHOULD HAVE, not SHOULD OF.
That is all.
[n/a] Shardik › Bill Z Bub 23-Jan-03/2:36 PM Reply
Thank you. Some times my brain gets fuzzy hunting snarks.
[n/a] lastobelus › Bill Z Bub 10-Mar-03/6:08 PM Reply
where I grew up, actually, "should of" was the proper usage. Actually, "shoulda", to be precise. "Should have" would be correct if one were, say, mulling one's choice of supper flesh: "I wonder if I should have the greasy pork, or the bloody beef. The pork looks awful tempting, but the beef is better for my heart. Damn! I shoulda never let that fool woman talk me into going to the doctor inna first place. Now alls I do is worry about my goddamn heart."
[7] jauser 23-Jan-03/5:50 PM Reply
beautiful, just beautiful
[8] Nicholas Jones 24-Jan-03/8:03 AM Reply
Very atmospheric. As ever, about the gap between reality and perception - or, to use Kantian terms, noumenon and phonemenon. Also, the last line reminds of a song by Half Man Half Biscuit called 'The Light at the End of the Tunnel is the Light of an Oncoming Train'. And anything that reminds me of the mighty merseyside combo must be good!
[6] hobojo 24-Jan-03/12:38 PM Reply
Funny
[n/a] MaliqaTara 31-Jan-03/10:08 AM Reply
Shardik, I have a coment for you. BREAK FREE! Your material is interesting, if a little metaphysical, but you base your writing too much on rules, amd so your expression gets lost. Blame your english teachers, they impressed your mind way too much.
[n/a] Shardik › MaliqaTara 31-Jan-03/1:52 PM Reply
I would, but unfortunately i never went to school, and when i was there... English was definitely my worst subject. So, that said... let's blame the inorganic being i wrestled with in the new mexican desert on 20 buttons of peyote, and my relentless interest behind who really pushes the smoke button in the city of Oz. Shall we? Great... here's how i break free. enjoy your Sexton.

http://gangbox.com/mp3/dear%20mrs%20sexton.mp3
[10] razorgrin 31-Jan-03/11:55 AM Reply
Very nice. I go for walks through shoulder-high snowbanks. It's dark and echoey.
[8] Nanshe 26-Feb-03/7:39 PM Reply
Delightful.
[10] suprembeaner 13-Sep-03/1:29 AM Reply
super tiz
3char1per
[7] blindwriter 20-Nov-04/7:23 PM Reply
Here again, several useless inserts that, contrary to popular opinion, don't serve to hold a piece together, but depreciate it's value.
I like the third stanza. Masterful.
[n/a] aamir_trichy 2-Sep-06/8:17 AM Reply
good!!