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PATIENCE (Lyric) by jroday Does the world have time and patiences for me?
Does the world have time and patiences too see?
I'm epileptic damn! that dont make you better than me.
Epilepsy or seizure take your choice.
In there line of work their the boss.
I'm only paying the cost.
When they decide to fire I suffer the lost.
You bring joy!
You bring pain!
There"s no one to blame.
Just understand my life is not the same.
Dont be blue! remain true! for it's you who can pull me through.
It's not the time to turn your back and walk away.
Please stay! and help me fight to see another day.
So open up your heart, that's a very good start.
Listen with your ears.
We've known about seizures through the years, and conquered
many fears.
For peace and happiness I do hope to fine.
I know one day peace and happiness I shall fine.
But I must continue to look until I fine peace of mine.
Up the ladder:
Bugs
Down the ladder:
The darkest woods ever
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.023256
Posted: May 17, 2004 6:24 AM PDT; Last modified: May 17, 2004 6:24 AM PDTWeighted score: 7.023222 Overall Rank: 59 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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yer realy interesting! I had a fit reading it!!
Q: What do you call an epileptic holding a glass of milk?
A: A milkshake. Q: What do you call an epileptic in your bathtub? A: A jacuzzi. Q: What do you call an epileptic in your garden? A: A seizure salad. Q: What's the ultimate doom for a leper? A: An epileptic fit. Q: What does an elephant use as a vibrator? A: An epileptic Q: What do you throw to an epileptic who is having a fit in the bath? A: Your laundry.
Q: What's blue and doesn't fit?
A: A dead epileptic.
Dark_Angel In our complete darkness we are all the same,It is only our knowledge and wisdom that separate us. dont let your eyes decieve you.
You appear to be talking to someone called Dark_Angel. I am not in darkness. I am in -=Dark_ness.
You asked me to give you my take on this poem, so here it is:
The poem is mushy, dull, and whiny. It's another poem where the writer is "reaching out" for acceptance, understanding, and help- Such poems irritate me, and is the sort of thing that wiser poets avoid writing. Again you've labeled your poem as a lyric, and its not. If you disagree, then explain to me how, in any way, it can be a lyric and actually be sung along with music. Theres slight hic-ups in your use of the english language also, such as: 'Does the world have [the] time and patiences too see?' --Patiences? Whats the s for? Theres no plural form for the word patience, its singular. Also, its good to use articles in english (the, a, & an) so use them. In there line of work their the boss. I'm only paying the cost. When they decide to fire I suffer the lost. --They who? Seizures? Are they some wierd race that torture those that suffer from epilepsy? Do you work for them and recieve pay and suffer the loss of a paycheck if they fire you? Thats quite odd.. doesn't make much sense really, wouldn't you agree? So with that said, you'll understand my blessing of zero.
SupremeDreamer I would like for you to read all my poems and tell
me what you think. I like your style It's up front and no bullshit I like a honest person, and being an amateur I need honesty.
at least someone else sees that half of the lyrics on this site aren't lyrics at all
Congratulations on making the top of the Best Lyrics list. Now, please sit down and put your pants back on. -10-
LOL
I remember when you started out with this. I hope this
does'nt take your life. 312 view(s)
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epileptic.to all the readers of this poem, please read
it close i'm sure your have some interesting comments
for me. Thank You JRODAY