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The darkest woods ever (Sonnet) by Shardik

They were the darkest woods ever At least that I had ever seen Trees with leaves almost of leather Animals, that struck me as too lean. So I quickened up my rigid stride While my eyes scanned for some light If I had a horse, full speed I'd ride If my lungs were not so tight. I never should have dared to trespass God damn shortcuts are always wrong Where is my boyscout with his compass? Why is this taking so awfully long!? Wait... Is that a light I see up ahead? No... Just the moon climbing higher instead.

MaliqaTara 31-Jan-03/10:08 AM
Shardik, I have a coment for you. BREAK FREE! Your material is interesting, if a little metaphysical, but you base your writing too much on rules, amd so your expression gets lost. Blame your english teachers, they impressed your mind way too much.




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