| Re: Unlocking Happiness by darkhelmet10 |
31-Mar-03/7:29 AM |
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oh ick. self-righteous as a prophet.
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| Re: Sex on the Weightbench by 2StonersThatCare |
31-Mar-03/7:25 AM |
8 is too much for this.....but i like the occasional punctuation of "Sex on the weightbench."
And that delicious mmm at the end!
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| Re: Why? Pt 1 by hdw |
31-Mar-03/7:17 AM |
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why indeed. whine for a few more hours, maybe it will help.
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| Re: Perversions 7: Viva Las Naked by razorgrin |
29-Mar-03/4:13 PM |
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your other perversions are much better.
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| Re: Red Skies and Thunderflies by intheailse |
28-Mar-03/10:07 AM |
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| Re: Hazy days by cleverdevice |
27-Mar-03/4:32 PM |
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muh....i don't like the end. its pretty vague but not in a good way and not final or strong at all. some excellant description though. i was glad it wasn't longer, it would've ruined the charm.
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| Re: Mirror to Mirror by Roisin |
27-Mar-03/4:24 PM |
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hhmmmm. simple. i like it.
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| Re: Thawed by Roisin |
12-Mar-03/5:57 PM |
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| Re: Prometheus sang for vultures by horus8 |
5-Mar-03/3:50 PM |
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i like this sort of thing. paranoid, evasive and bitter. 8
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| Re: His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger |
1-Mar-03/7:56 PM |
Ranger i've read some of your other works and although i respect your language and obvious intelligence sometimes when i'm reading your poetry i don't enjoy the piece at all because i'm so busy critiquing it as i go.
i have a just one piece of advice for you. stop trying to rhyme. anything. at all.
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| Re: I have nothing left to steal. by lost in america |
1-Mar-03/7:36 PM |
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kind of nice...a little sparse
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| Re: Moon In My Blood by AtalantaPendragonne |
27-Feb-03/1:33 PM |
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when i read this it made me think back to biblical times in israel, in the time of leah and rachel and jacob and of how the women would save their blood, using it as libations. how when they bleed they'd stay seperate from men and those men would take a few wives, some concubines. well done.
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| Re: a comment on Esperanza by Fear of Garbage |
24-Feb-03/3:59 PM |
thats funny.
lets see what kind of shit
you come up with when you post
your poetry,
you insipid, unoriginal waif.
you already make me want to take
a hot iron to my face.
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| Re: a comment on Esperanza by Fear of Garbage |
24-Feb-03/12:22 PM |
i don't know but this poem is actually based on the main
character of The House on Mango Street
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| Re: Stout Stick by Enki |
23-Feb-03/2:44 PM |
2 complaints.
1st i don't think you need to add a second "in the closet" in the first verse.
2nd the last line of the second verse is absolutely pathetic
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| Re: The Rooms by crownfox |
23-Feb-03/2:41 PM |
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mmmm i like it and i get the end but its a litle unclear and anonymous
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| Re: News Values (some time last November) by Nicholas Jones |
21-Feb-03/1:24 PM |
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i quite like this although i don't really think its a poem. maybe i only like it cuz i do the same thingwith the tv and the worrying and the fear and such
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| Re: Quadroons by Shardik |
17-Feb-03/6:50 PM |
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mad applause for the 5th line
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| Re: Atonement by aperfecttool77 |
17-Feb-03/5:32 PM |
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i like your name tho by the way
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| Re: Atonement by aperfecttool77 |
17-Feb-03/5:31 PM |
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this is terrible. let me give you a piece of advice my english teacher always told me: show me, don't tell me.
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