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Hazy days (Free verse) by cleverdevice
The bitter smell of dry tarmac and a rainbow shimmering in the spray from a sprinkler reminds me of her. Canvas clad deckchairs spring memories of hot days and cold drinks, sprawling in the blaze. The Sun bronzed us as I waited for something to happen. It never did. Now I'm left with echos of a girl who's features are etched on some distant part of my mind. And, as I can never lose them, I cannot encourage them furthur. Look but don't touch. One day I might find her but until then, recollections are all that I'll have left of my summer of love.

Up the ladder: A Little Peace
Down the ladder: dazed

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10100
Posted: March 26, 2003 12:44 PM PST; Last modified: June 23, 2003 3:13 AM PDT
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[7] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 27-Mar-03/11:48 AM | Reply
"remind" try pluralizing this.

"I'll have left of my summer of love."
I have left of my summer in love.

[n/a] Fear of Garbage @ 64.56.114.235 | 27-Mar-03/4:32 PM | Reply
muh....i don't like the end. its pretty vague but not in a good way and not final or strong at all. some excellant description though. i was glad it wasn't longer, it would've ruined the charm.
[8] Ranger @ 217.40.231.55 | 18-Apr-03/12:54 AM | Reply
Must agree with Fear of Garbage here, but other than that it's great!
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.164.180 | 23-Jun-03/4:22 AM | Reply
sad and beautifull song of love never realized only dreamed or so it seems.. -10-
[2] nentwined @ 68.232.253.122 | 4-Oct-06/6:04 PM | Reply
who's <-- whose

who's means "who is", as in "who's going to fix that?"
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