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A Little Peace (Lyric) by intheailse Kiss my eyes and tell me
It'll be alright
And if the sun will go down
tell me its not night
Hold my soul in your arms
Don't let go
Keep my heart in your hands
And I won't go
Just a little peace
It's not that hard
Just a little peace
For my heart
Up the ladder:
Home
Down the ladder:
Hazy days
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Posted: March 21, 2003 6:52 AM PST; Last modified: March 21, 2003 6:52 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10104 Comments:
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37
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21-Mar-03/12:35 PM
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Drivel. oh umm... no... wait... Yeah, just plain drivel. There just isn't anything here. Not trying to be mean but you are way too vague. Who do you want to kiss your eyes? What are you afraid of the dark? Are you just trying to be confusing and pointless in your second stanza? A little peace of/from what? When your poem answers those questions (Or at least some of them) then I'll try and rate you better. For now (hopefully without hard feelings) I give this a -3-. Rewrite it and I'll be happy to give you a higher score.
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intheailse @ 195.92.168.165
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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21-Mar-03/12:40 PM
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why does it have to answer anything....if anything your'e supposed to answer those things, not me....
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37
> intheailse
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21-Mar-03/1:19 PM
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Yes in the end but I have to have at least a little information in order to work with.
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