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A Little Peace (Lyric) by intheailse

Kiss my eyes and tell me It'll be alright And if the sun will go down tell me its not night Hold my soul in your arms Don't let go Keep my heart in your hands And I won't go Just a little peace It's not that hard Just a little peace For my heart

thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Mar-03/12:35 PM
Drivel. oh umm... no... wait... Yeah, just plain drivel. There just isn't anything here. Not trying to be mean but you are way too vague. Who do you want to kiss your eyes? What are you afraid of the dark? Are you just trying to be confusing and pointless in your second stanza? A little peace of/from what? When your poem answers those questions (Or at least some of them) then I'll try and rate you better. For now (hopefully without hard feelings) I give this a -3-. Rewrite it and I'll be happy to give you a higher score.




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