| Re: a comment on My Poison ( Vodka ) by Brittanyy |
3-Nov-04/9:29 AM |
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please tell me that was sarcasm. and I'm not angry at you, brittanyy, but the poem is just...not very good. you don't know that much about writing and it shows.
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| Re: My Poison ( Vodka ) by Brittanyy |
2-Nov-04/11:13 AM |
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I am so sick of this site. Fine, if I get a 2 I won't complain for myself, but stop giving dribbling shit like this 10s.
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| Re: a comment on A Letter Home by Fear of Garbage |
2-Nov-04/11:08 AM |
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do you even know what a sestina is? there's lots of repitition...
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| Re: a comment on To Leave a Trace by Dovina |
18-Oct-04/2:13 PM |
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| Re: To Leave a Trace by Dovina |
18-Oct-04/12:50 PM |
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Getting back to the poem...I will have to agree that this is a little bland. But it's not an insult, just criticism, so don't take it the worng way.
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| Re: Me helping Me by ThoughtfulSoul |
18-Oct-04/12:43 PM |
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you ripped this page right out of your diary didn't you
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| Re: Zipmark'd by fevriere |
18-Oct-04/12:40 PM |
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its not cute at all. please, put it all into normal context and it will be rated much higher.
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| Re: Another Endless Night by MacFrantic |
18-Oct-04/12:27 PM |
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Did you write this with syllables in mind? I can't make up my mind.
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| Re: Turbulence by horus8 |
18-Oct-04/12:22 PM |
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The first half of this really got me going...and then that kind of cop-out at the end....
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| Re: a comment on On Going Blind by Fear of Garbage |
15-Oct-04/11:10 AM |
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I don't have a link...I wrote this at a museum, but I'm sure you could find it if you did a search.
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| Re: a comment on The Bed by Fear of Garbage |
28-May-04/10:55 AM |
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I never thought about that. I guess I do use "it/its" too much.
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| Re: loneliness untold by francis nor capule |
27-May-04/7:39 AM |
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Have you all lost your minds? This is not a good poem. A bore. I could barely make it through.
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| Re: In Love as in Love by Everyone |
27-May-04/7:32 AM |
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Your poems are always the poster child of anti-climax.
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| Re: Unwed by gilded in gold |
21-May-04/11:19 AM |
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I side with zodiac. Although I'm not known for understandable poetry, this is beyond even me.
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| Re: Its the same old static & flaccid striptease. by SupremeDreamer |
27-Apr-04/11:16 AM |
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Yes, oblivion becomes me is awful, but there are some good parts, especially your tendency toward internal rhyme.
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| Re: Of Gods & Beast In Villanelle by Bachus |
27-Apr-04/11:02 AM |
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Oh yes. That's very good.
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| Re: The Conqueror Worm by zodiac |
22-Apr-04/7:54 AM |
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Zodiac, this is so weird. When did you write this? April 21, huh? I guess it must have been shortly before my Tribute To Edgar Allen Poe...that's a pretty fucking weird coincidence.
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| Re: The Negro by Everyone |
22-Apr-04/7:40 AM |
nice, but I do have a couple problems. Some of the rhymes sound forced and the ending is nothing special.
however, that jolting sensation? Where you smoothly rhyme two long lines, then go abruptly short? Don't change that.
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| Re: Biography I (1996) by halofriendly |
22-Apr-04/7:36 AM |
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the beginning is what the rest of this should be like.
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| Re: Quintus: Lesson 1 by richa |
22-Apr-04/7:33 AM |
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nice. are there going to be more lessons or is this a one time thing?
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