Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool	19-Apr-04/11:03 AM
This is really boring, but at least it wasn't long.
Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone	19-Apr-04/11:01 AM
Alright, I get it. Love rhymes with above
Re: The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons	15-Apr-04/10:37 AM
Haunting and arresting. Great first line.
Re: a comment on The Price You Pay by Fear of Garbage	15-Apr-04/10:32 AM
No, this really is about a person.
Re: a comment on We Need To Buy Socks, Michael by Fear of Garbage	15-Apr-04/9:29 AM
haha no, not really
Re: a comment on The Price You Pay by Fear of Garbage	15-Apr-04/9:18 AM
is that a criticism or a compliment?
Re: Tennessee by wilco	25-Mar-04/10:45 AM
predictable yes, but the ending was worded more beautifully than past arrangements. well done.
Re: a comment on New Years Eve, 1999 by wilco	24-Mar-04/7:08 AM
that does make more sense when you explain it. i guess i was just being a bitch
Re: a comment on Quiet Lakes by Fear of Garbage	23-Mar-04/11:17 AM
You don't think ending with bodies would be too blunt?
Re: Puritans by zodiac	23-Mar-04/11:04 AM
alright first of all before I get angry I have to say I respect you very much as a writer, and as someone obviously much younger, I even look up to some of it. But there is absolutely no way that I could ever let myself feel like a "flaming bullshit poeser," just becasue I don't write many things that rhyme. There's just no ground for it.
Re: A Permanent Fixture by wilco	23-Mar-04/9:30 AM
ok now be honest. you wrote this awhile ago too, didn't you? good, but not as good as the first poem i read of yours. i really thought the last sanza was good, the 1st three lines anyway, but the last line just kind of faded out. i think....maybe you need to work on your endings. something more...grabbing or poignant.
Re: a comment on New Years Eve, 1999 by wilco	23-Mar-04/9:09 AM
When you were 20? That's no excuse. How old are you now? Don't you revise old things before you post them again? I wouldn't trust my poems from a year or two ago.
Re: Buried pyramid by zodiac	18-Mar-04/8:49 AM
Zodiac, you're the only one who comments anymore. I have to give this a 10
Re: New Years Eve, 1999 by wilco	18-Mar-04/8:42 AM
when I first started reading this, I really like it. I think it flouders midway but regains it's strengh towards the end. there are a few lines that bother me though, especially in the last stanza. I was expecting something that would floor me, but all I got was something that sounded like you gave up. Also, if you revise this, please take the word "etched" out the last stanza. maybe that was what ruined it. I'm giving it a 9 anyway.
Re: a comment on The Benefits of Living in a House by Fear of Garbage	17-Mar-04/10:54 AM
It was presents. But I see what you mean.
Re: a comment on Neurons by Fear of Garbage	15-Mar-04/10:54 AM
one of your lines? which one would that be?
Re: a comment on Neurons by Fear of Garbage	15-Mar-04/10:34 AM
have I been away long?
Re: Cold Rain Road by middenHeap	29-Jan-04/7:36 AM
alright. i like: hunched black bird,the pole, fragile egg body, gingerly, the jarring last line. i dislike: beginning a line with the word "but," steel cubes (a poor metaphor) and i think thats about it. interesting but ultimately could be much better if you just wrote it all together like a flow and din't worry about. i might be wrong but this sounds like it was written at different times...there are these intervals..
Re: Lullaby by Goad	27-Jan-04/7:53 AM
this is beautiful. i went into thinking oh god a lullaby, but you surprised me. spiders and pills, spiders and pills. 10
Re: the wire by Bill Z Bub	20-Sep-03/7:21 PM
saves the best for the last half no pretention