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the wire (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
my resources are limited entangled by my own unwinding threads I have studied the effects of thirst firsthand and dug up pipebombs from the playground I have run my finger over this bundle again and again red black green, yellow and blue felt in the dark for a pair of pliers found a hand instead found you
Down the ladder: all in one day
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8
Weighted score: 5.2145653
Overall Rank: 4351
Posted: September 20, 2003 2:44 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2003 2:44 PM PDT
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[n/a] deleted user @ 64.63.204.8 | 20-Sep-03/4:16 PM | Reply
cut the red wire. no...the blue one.
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 20-Sep-03/5:42 PM | Reply
"found a hand,
instead
of you"
[8] Fear of Garbage @ 64.56.113.106 | 20-Sep-03/7:21 PM | Reply
saves the best for the last half
no pretention
[10] deleted user @ 63.228.147.122 | 1-Oct-03/8:06 PM | Reply
"I have studied the effects of thirst
firsthand

and dug up pipebombs
from the playground" Nice word play, it's really a stunning piece.
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