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The Flame (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool The fire consumes me,
It is all around,
I cry for help,
But no one hears,
So slowly I die,
In pain,
And alone,
The Flame.
Up the ladder:
I am an genius, and you're a stupid turd
Down the ladder:
Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank-
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.9
Posted: April 18, 2004 8:10 PM PDT; Last modified: April 18, 2004 8:10 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.95 Overall Rank: 8984 Comments:
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deleted user @ 68.66.196.168
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18-Apr-04/8:44 PM
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Now maybe you've swung too far into vagueness. That's ok, you seem to get better with each new poem.
sorry - didn't like it. need to elaborate or something i think. diggin the concept but it didn't pack enough punch (in my very humble opinion).
just being real. hope not to offend you know...
yo poem needs help, too simplistic
better than smoke inhalation, which is more than i can say for many of the others.
This is really boring, but at least it wasn't long.
no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.
hey, this has something to it. Not sure what it is. Ilike the shortness and the despair of it. keep at it.
A flawlessly-performing tripe-detector.
And you deserve to die after penning this tripe.
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