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Sonnet № 97969

The Conqueror Worm

by zodiac

Member since 2004 · Posted 21 Apr 2004 · Edited 21 Apr 2004 · 18 comments

- I've got a boat for brains: I'm wracked with storms: This late-tequila evening in the dorms has done me in, so neither soft nor firm are all the bedroom's shadow-painted forms. Unquiet ghosts, a veritable sturm und drang dance 'round my head like leaves, like swarms of those phantasmagoric pachyderms. I'm not to blame! The Worm! That Conqueror Worm unwinds, sinks, spirals, eyes me from a warm translucent kind of hell. He is the germ of my unrest and peace. I struggle, squirm, and know then I am vaquished: Hail the Worm! (The Conquering Worm!) Come wrap me in your long, soft-tendriled arms and keep me until morning safe from harm.

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18 comments

[7] Shuushin 21-Apr-04/11:06 AM Reply
Sure, I'll buy that.

Stayed fairly iambic too - Sasha will still bitch (cuz he want to be your).
[10] Sasha › Shuushin 28-Aug-05/10:03 PM Reply
Pshaw!
[5] deleted user 21-Apr-04/1:01 PM Reply
Zodiac, you are such a nitwit. Zoetrope is Francis Ford Coppolas (you probably have no idea who he is) on-line workshop for screenplays, flash fiction, poetry, flash fiction on and on. And as a matter of fact you smug child, I have been published several times, ever heard of NFG? didn't think so. grow up stop being such a little arse. And you are a fool if you don't think agents freqent these sites, obviously you are not a serious writer, just a poser.
[n/a] zodiac › deleted user 21-Apr-04/1:21 PM Reply
1) Everyone knows who Francis Coppola is; he's a famous recluse who designs improbable gigantic flying machines.
2) Zoetrope's website (all-STORY.com) describes itself thusly: "In 1997, Francis Ford Coppola launched a magazine devoted to supporting the brightest young voices in fiction. In its short history, Zoetrope: All-Story has received every major short fiction award, including the National Magazine Award for Fiction..." Are you noticing the repetition of certain words? I am.
3) NFG is a crock. Even nentwined says so.
4) Ask yourself this question: Why in GOD'S NAME would an agent frequent a hack internet open-style poetry site when they've each got THOUSANDS UPON FUCKING THOUSANDS of hack budding poets breaking down their doors already, without having had to exert ANY EFFORT on their own parts?
5) Wait, here's another: Do you really believe having a 'literary agent' means shit? (A clue: No.)
6) Before you answer, let me point out the obvious to you: you don't have an agent yourself. In fact, aside from your knowledge of three online publications (one of which isn't a poetry publication) you don't know squat about the business of publishing poetry. That is all. You may be seated.
[n/a] zodiac › zodiac 21-Apr-04/1:37 PM Reply
7) You said flash fiction twice.
8) And so what? Anyone can make decent-looking flash fiction. Here's one of mine: http://tinyurl.com/3dof7.
9) Too = adverb; To = preposition. Don't need an agent to figure that one out.
10) "Reading your comments is like listening to Elton John whistling Crocodile Rock through his toothgap while fellating me, Simon Cowell" - Simon Cowell.
11) I've decided you need a lesson. What say you to a spanking for every year of your naughty misspent life? Ready?...
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › deleted user 21-Apr-04/1:25 PM Reply
You're gay.
[n/a] richa › deleted user 21-Apr-04/2:15 PM Reply
why are you so obnoxious holdstill?

and why do you give high marks to the least adept poems?
[5] deleted user 21-Apr-04/1:07 PM Reply
this souns like something you wrote while on drugs.
[n/a] zodiac › deleted user 21-Apr-04/1:22 PM Reply
It was while drunk on tequila, nincompoop. Thanks for the 5!
[n/a] richa › deleted user 4-May-04/2:55 PM Reply
Could it be possible that zodiac was not on drugs when he wrote this but rather you were on drugs when you read it?
[n/a] Fear of Garbage 22-Apr-04/7:54 AM Reply
Zodiac, this is so weird. When did you write this? April 21, huh? I guess it must have been shortly before my Tribute To Edgar Allen Poe...that's a pretty fucking weird coincidence.
[8] ggawrysi 28-Apr-04/11:47 AM Reply
actually, Mezcal has the worm in it, not Tequila. other than that i enjoyed the poem until the last two lines, which came as a sudden shift. i don't mind a quick twist, but i liked where the poem was going rather than where it ended up.
[n/a] zodiac › ggawrysi 28-Apr-04/12:57 PM Reply
Mezcal and tequila are 99% the same thing. When I was in Mexico the Mexicans I knew occasionally used 'tequila' describe both.
[7] Shuushin 30-Apr-04/11:44 AM Reply
Simply the best thing you've ever fucking done.

Brilliant. Absolutely Memorable. I'll take it to my grave and I am grateful that I have seen it before I go there.
[10] Sasha 4-May-04/2:27 PM Reply
I enjoy the first line especially. The moody internal M's throughout the piece make it feel somewhat surreal.
[10] Sasha 4-May-04/2:28 PM Reply
However, I might add, it doesen't make a lot of sense; it doesen't have to though to be good.
[7] Blue Magpie 5-Sep-04/9:53 AM Reply
Spreading Sturm und drang across two lines looks very poor, you ae breaking aconcept where no concept should be broken, still there is some nice imagery here, made me remember being an undergraduate.
[n/a] ALChemy 26-Nov-05/2:37 AM Reply
Thought you might like this.
http://www.poemhunter.com/p/m/poem.asp?poem=93543