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The Conqueror Worm (Sonnet) by zodiac

- I've got a boat for brains: I'm wracked with storms: This late-tequila evening in the dorms has done me in, so neither soft nor firm are all the bedroom's shadow-painted forms. Unquiet ghosts, a veritable sturm und drang dance 'round my head like leaves, like swarms of those phantasmagoric pachyderms. I'm not to blame! The Worm! That Conqueror Worm unwinds, sinks, spirals, eyes me from a warm translucent kind of hell. He is the germ of my unrest and peace. I struggle, squirm, and know then I am vaquished: Hail the Worm! (The Conquering Worm!) Come wrap me in your long, soft-tendriled arms and keep me until morning safe from harm.

Blue Magpie 5-Sep-04/9:53 AM
Spreading Sturm und drang across two lines looks very poor, you ae breaking aconcept where no concept should be broken, still there is some nice imagery here, made me remember being an undergraduate.




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