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My Poison ( Vodka )

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Nov 2004 · 17 comments

Clear, Imitation Purity. So Clean, Disarming... Take a Shot, Play the game, Everybodys doing it, Dont be lame, Hug the toilet, Feel the shame, You played with the fire Now you lay in the flame.

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17 comments

[n/a] richa 2-Nov-04/5:42 AM Reply

'feel the shame' about vomitting seems a bit over the top. If getting pissed is cool then so is vomitting it back up again.

Also 'now you lay in the flame' seems an odd line to use. It would probably be more meaningful if you were talking about a drink it is traditional to set fire to and drink. Just a thought.

[n/a] Brittanyy › richa 3-Nov-04/6:12 AM Reply

Yea..You're probably right..Vodka is flamable tho right?

[n/a] Fear of Garbage 2-Nov-04/11:13 AM Reply

I am so sick of this site. Fine, if I get a 2 I won't complain for myself, but stop giving dribbling shit like this 10s.

[n/a] Brittanyy › Fear of Garbage 3-Nov-04/6:08 AM Reply

Wow...Lol..So much anger..Don't get mad at me because your poems suck ass buddy...

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Fear of Garbage 3-Nov-04/7:00 AM Reply

You don't get 10s because you don't merit 10s. This is a really good poeme, and Brittanyy tried really hard. That's why she gets 10s - she goes that extra mile. You need to try a bit harder - I'm sure you'll get there in the end! -10-

[n/a] Fear of Garbage › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 3-Nov-04/9:29 AM Reply

please tell me that was sarcasm. and I'm not angry at you, brittanyy, but the poem is just...not very good. you don't know that much about writing and it shows.

[n/a] Brittanyy › Fear of Garbage 3-Nov-04/2:09 PM Reply

Poetry to me, isnt about skill it's about expressing yourself in a creative way. I've read through your poems and I really don't think you have any place to say my poem is "Not very good" before you tell me about my knowledge in writing go back and read some of the trash you have written. All writers have their good poems and bad poems...Yes Genius...Even you have bad poems whether you like to admit it or not.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Brittanyy 3-Nov-04/2:40 PM Reply

I totally agree. You have only to look at the number of 10s you get compared to Fear of Garbage to prove that. As for poetry not being about skill, but being about the skill of expressing yourself in a creative way, I think you're right. That's definitely, definitely true.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Fear of Garbage 3-Nov-04/2:43 PM Reply

You'll never be a professional poete if you refuse to accept that some people are better writers than you. There's a lot you could learn from Brittanyy, but you won't learn a thing if you continue to berate her. I'm sure you have a lot of feelings and emotions bursting to come out - don't let your ego spoil it. Good luck!

[n/a] Goad › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Jan-05/10:33 AM Reply

You disgusting parody of a sanctimonious old goat, this pome is nothing but a hard lump pulled at random from your colostomy bag. You gave it a 10 because it reminds you of your bed in the morning.

[n/a] zodiac 3-Nov-04/12:58 AM Reply

I'm with richa. By the time you're vomiting, you're not ashamed of much of anything.

[n/a] Brittanyy › zodiac 3-Nov-04/6:10 AM Reply

Yea..The funny thing is..I was drunk when I wrote this...And it shows! It shows!!!

[n/a] edpeterson 3-Nov-04/9:05 AM Reply

so, you are saying, "now you copulate in the flame" ?

[5] Jeremi B. Handrinos › edpeterson 3-Nov-04/10:15 AM Reply

lol

[5] Jeremi B. Handrinos 3-Nov-04/10:15 AM Reply

Shut up.

[3] Beyond_Dreams 31-Jan-05/9:04 PM Reply

I hate "now you lay in the flame". And whats so shamefull about hugging the toilet, i've done that a million times gotten up wiped my mouth and drank some more. I'm proud of my drinking binges!

[n/a] Brittanyy › Beyond_Dreams 2-Feb-05/8:55 AM Reply

Well good for you!