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My Poison ( Vodka ) (Free verse) by Brittanyy

Clear, Imitation Purity. So Clean, Disarming... Take a Shot, Play the game, Everybodys doing it, Dont be lame, Hug the toilet, Feel the shame, You played with the fire Now you lay in the flame.

richa 2-Nov-04/5:42 AM
'feel the shame' about vomitting seems a bit over the top. If getting pissed is cool then so is vomitting it back up again.

Also 'now you lay in the flame' seems an odd line to use. It would probably be more meaningful if you were talking about a drink it is traditional to set fire to and drink. Just a thought.




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