| Re: a comment on Blessing in desguise by GekoHawaii |
20-Nov-03/7:16 PM |
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Thanks alot. This is the kind of comment I came to this site hoping for, but instead I was bashed and ridiculed by some of the members. Namely Dark Angel. Again thanks. I'll work on a revision.
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| Re: a comment on Blessing in desguise by GekoHawaii |
20-Nov-03/7:14 PM |
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Not yet. It's kind of a long term goal to someday in my life get there.
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| Re: Lost by Luv2write |
21-Apr-03/7:17 PM |
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This is one of your best poems that I have seen. It definitely gets my approval. Nice job.
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| Re: ForMyFriend, Joneel by Luv2write |
21-Apr-03/7:13 PM |
Jomegan?...
The meter needs a little work...but the idea and rhyme are good.
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| Re: Life by Luv2write |
21-Apr-03/7:10 PM |
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I've seen you do better. I know this has a deeper message but you could have written it a little differently to portray it in a way that would have been more powerful. My advice is to keep the good idea and try again in a different style.
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| Re: Leave by Luv2write |
21-Apr-03/7:05 PM |
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Again a nice twist...though it does get a little repetitive before you get there...
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| Re: Salt Water by OneFingerAnswer |
19-Apr-03/7:22 AM |
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Overall an amazing poem, but just felt like silly didn't really fit in though. Maybe you could look for a different adjective. Since in the whole dark and wise tone of the whole poem, silly is a little naive and childish.
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| Re: Tears Falling by loneshadow29 |
19-Apr-03/7:17 AM |
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Nice job with an overdone subject. You added something different to it..just what I can't put my finger on, but I like it.
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| Re: Live by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/6:39 PM |
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Hm...wow. As you can see religion is a touchy subject. Something that anyone and everyone is willing to argue with, since no two people have the same exact beliefs. Cheers to you for hitting such a controversial subject on a public site.
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| Re: Waiting by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/6:33 PM |
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mmm...yet again a great unseen twist. I like your style. It's out of the ordinary which is always a good thing. Great poem, but again there were a few minor meter difficulties that can be fixed fairly easily.
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| Re: My friend by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/6:30 PM |
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Oo...Nice twist, good rhyme scheme, overall good poetry. The meter needs a little work but that is something that can be easily fixed.
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| Re: At Least I Love You by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/6:26 PM |
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Thanks for the inspiring words. I have friends that tell me then same, though I still don't believe it.
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| Re: mirror by famenglory |
23-Mar-03/6:20 PM |
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| Re: Rain by famenglory |
23-Mar-03/6:17 PM |
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So...ju wanna sleep wid da fishies...I tink we can arrange dat...
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| Re: All Alone Again by Spindle |
7-Feb-03/6:28 AM |
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Overall nice job. It just needs a little tweaking in the words to help it flow a little better.
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| Re: alms by famenglory |
27-Jan-03/9:10 PM |
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Wow. Again I'm impressed. Very deep and true. Like in a higher level hippy spiritual kind of way.
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| Re: amanda by famenglory |
27-Jan-03/9:03 PM |
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It's my goal to be able to write like you. I think I'll send this to my ex amanda.
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