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Life (Other) by Luv2write Life's not so bad
When everyone's sick
Life's not so bad
When everyone's hurting
Life's not so bad
When everyone's suffering
Life's not so bad
When everyone's lonely
Life's not so bad
When it's over
Up the ladder:
Breaking Away
Down the ladder:
Idle
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Posted: March 23, 2003 7:45 PM PST; Last modified: March 23, 2003 7:45 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.37247 Overall Rank: 13033 Comments:
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23-Mar-03/8:21 PM
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see other comment. unless you're 12. then go see a guidance counsellor.
What the hell is this? Woe is I?
I've seen you do better. I know this has a deeper message but you could have written it a little differently to portray it in a way that would have been more powerful. My advice is to keep the good idea and try again in a different style.
i see where your comming from. needs more style
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