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Life (Other) by Luv2write

Life's not so bad When everyone's sick Life's not so bad When everyone's hurting Life's not so bad When everyone's suffering Life's not so bad When everyone's lonely Life's not so bad When it's over

GekoHawaii 21-Apr-03/7:10 PM
I've seen you do better. I know this has a deeper message but you could have written it a little differently to portray it in a way that would have been more powerful. My advice is to keep the good idea and try again in a different style.




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