Re: The Drunkest ever by horus8	6-Mar-03/4:00 AM
I like it lots. I don't understand the last line's relevence but I'm sure you'd be happy to explain. By the way, is there an instant messanger program that you use? No need to put your sn up. Just tell me the program and I'll tell you mine. I'd like to ask you for some help with a piece that isn't even ready for this site yet. Mostly because it's more of an idea than a piece.
Re: a comment on Text Messages Sent by blueENDyellow	6-Mar-03/3:51 AM
Don't worry about anything DA says. He's kind of this site's Tajiri. I'm sure you know what I mean.
Re: a comment on The Fire Giver by OneFingerAnswer	6-Mar-03/3:47 AM
No problem with the misunderstanding. It's a little hard to get at if it's not pointed out. And Wow! A 10? I never give tens and never in my wildest dreams expected to get one. Thanks.
Re: A Losing Streak by Jigg	5-Mar-03/5:24 PM
The last line gave me quite the chuckle. The rest was decent enough. 6.
Re: a comment on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos	5-Mar-03/5:19 PM
Yes and yes. But you're the author so if it doesn't to you then whatever.
Re: Prometheus sang for vultures by horus8	5-Mar-03/2:11 PM
Hmmm... I wrote something simular in a poem not too long ago. http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=42131 Yours is short, sweet (or bitter rather), and to point. 7.
Re: Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos	5-Mar-03/1:32 AM
I remember in third grade I wrote Save the whales Save them all Save the whales Big and small I thought I was a genius. I later found out I was wrong. "All(1)+ people(2)+ are(1)+ flawed(2)" = 6. Maybe... "All people are flaws" It's a little harsher but it fits.
Re: Home by morffrom	5-Mar-03/1:24 AM
Simple and nice. One question. Green air?
Re: Something for Lynn by Jeremi B. Handrinos	5-Mar-03/1:19 AM
I really have nothing to say. I think it's about as solid as it gets. 9. And only cause I don't give 10's.
Re: a comment on Look Who's Talking by OneFingerAnswer	5-Mar-03/1:15 AM
Yeah it should be with in but I don't think that's worthy of an edit. (I'm lazy.) I'm glad you metioned the content because I want to get that out of the way early. This isn't about God and Satan as dieties or religious figures. Rather it's about "good" and "bad." One way I was taking it was the idea that good behavior doesn't attract much attention. I actually had one of my classmates from highschool in mind. He was a "good kid" and all through high school he was B/C average. Three days before graduation he ran himself into a tree in the car his parents had bought him as a graduation present. He lived through it even though he hadn't meant to. When I asked him why he did it he said "To be remembered." To be honest, I think it worked.
Re: For her he swam with sharks by Shardik	2-Mar-03/6:09 PM
Hidden meaning? I can't find it. Your vagueness needs to be balanced with hints. Too much vague and you aren't understood. Too many hints and it's no fun.
Re: For those who play with shit by <{Baba^Yaga}>	2-Mar-03/6:02 PM
Hmmmm....Topic isn't great. Style isn't great. Poem isn't great. I think I do detect a pattern. I expected better from you. Next?
Re: FIRETRUCK by Garrett S Sexton	1-Mar-03/1:17 AM
50? Uch! Good poem but that's gross. Some one better warn the mechanic.
Re: sandbars by rompingcat	1-Mar-03/12:30 AM
Nice images with bad connections. The first stanza doesn't even seem to belong there.
Re: first kiss by lost in america	1-Mar-03/12:23 AM
I like it. Reminds me of myself not too long ago. Sweet. Innocent. Naive? Good luck. (6)
Re: a comment on The Fate of the Gilt by OneFingerAnswer	26-Feb-03/6:31 PM
Yeah I guess it should be shouldn't it? That's what happens when I write after two days of no sleep. Creativity up, (or inhibition down if you prefer) grammer/organization down. What does the "e" mean?
Re: without a father by judea	26-Feb-03/12:29 AM
I'm not sure if it was intentional or not but the lack of punctuation and capitalization together with the rhyme scheme lend the poem a childish feel but the words and tense give it a clashing more adolescent feel. I think that a rewrite with words more appropriate for a child and with a present tense or punctuation and capitalization could help. If the lack of the two is just laziness then shame on you. A poet should know that every part of a work plays into how it is read.
Re: a comment on a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub	26-Feb-03/12:16 AM
Then again, purple is the color associated with sex as are exotic things. An since it says "exotic purple scent" it could just be your own pheromones at the site of her that you smelled. So long, as she finds being sexy a positive it could be a compliment to who ever your sweet little flower is.
Re: More from unlucky janitors by Bachus	26-Feb-03/12:00 AM
What buiding is this? I'd like to avoid Stan and his freindless colleague
Re: a comment on On The First Night by OneFingerAnswer	24-Feb-03/9:39 AM
Although this was a spur of the moment piece and thus I think it fits to be more sentiment than concrete I'd be willing to take suggestions on ways to revise.