| Re: live for love by DeadtotheWorld |
8-Jun-03/7:28 PM |
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shit on a stick with a side of shit-o (poo jello).
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| Re: Mistake or Misfortune by DeadtotheWorld |
8-Jun-03/7:20 PM |
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A shitzsicle of the coldest calibur.
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| Re: Christ Kebab by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
8-Jun-03/1:58 PM |
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| Re: Snowball by INTRANSIT |
8-Jun-03/1:25 PM |
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| Re: motel 666 by crwncka1 |
8-Jun-03/1:23 PM |
"for today these walls spoken of
course still appear standing firm as ever" you could make this legible in a future edit, because it sucks and ruins your poem, since it makes no fucking sense.
"appear to be just what they always where" were, not where. and again in the line after that "where" is were.
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| Re: days past by ElephantSandwich |
8-Jun-03/1:19 PM |
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| Re: Within by Schizophrenic |
6-Jun-03/9:54 PM |
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"You know what that sound is Mr. Anderson?" The sound of inevitability. *bang*
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| Re: Secret Identities Revealed by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
6-Jun-03/9:50 PM |
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| Re: sand between the toes by pacleves |
6-Jun-03/8:28 PM |
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Remember when Godzilla fought monster zero? just kidding. 7. but just barely.
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| Re: a comment on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm |
6-Jun-03/8:21 PM |
A) i do. lol (peeker)
b) not if your a refined scholar as the likes of da, or christof, or p&k the'd be civil and finish their toast before calling their accountant then lawyer. Because they are learnded men of the clothe.
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| Re: a comment on Bad habits & tramps by horus8 |
6-Jun-03/8:17 PM |
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Hey, i see you've got your flyer up for your new gig. I saw my name and started to fan my feint left knee, who, apparently was unaware that it was the left knee of a splendid young poet, therefore my knee asked the back of my face for an hair sample and autograph, and is much happier at work now. i then vomited.
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| Re: a comment on Abortion by horus8 |
6-Jun-03/8:00 PM |
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Tsk. And after all that smoke I blew up your ass yesterday? Sir, you disnobber my foul name. The correct order is actually 4,3,1,2. That is all, thank you for the time you took out of your busy day to come and mill around my creation in full wobble, I know you are a busy bee here at poemranker.com, and, well, to be honest, goes practically unnoticed of late, but there was a time when you would walk, and I would feel it all around me like the falling barometer, but now it's like bringing the special kid over once a week as a sort of neiborhood parent obligation, you know, like "hey, marge, I'll watch timmy for the afternoon it's no problem" then you weasel facts about their sex life from the easilly manipulated handicap boy, because he feels obligated to be honest with you since you are always so nice to him and you push him on the swings while his dad works late, you know what i mean? that's what your visits remind me of now, babysitting the special kid.
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| Re: a comment on Break Down by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
6-Jun-03/5:51 PM |
Go to gangbox it's on the mp3 page in the seventy's. let me know what you think keep in my mind that it's acoustic using my computer's mic for a rough copt to give me an Idea before i go into the studio, but I'd be interested in getting some feedback. I could however e mail you an mp3 of it electrified. listen to the one first then let me know.
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| Re: a comment on Thracian mountains until the Sea by Shardik |
6-Jun-03/5:44 PM |
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| Re: a comment on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm |
6-Jun-03/5:37 PM |
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That's where we differ than. Other than beastiality and extreme unction aside, naturally.
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| Re: a comment on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm |
6-Jun-03/5:24 PM |
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I think it's probably more that your mind is counter evaluating everything but couples currently due to your recent love loss. At least that's what a Jew shrink would tell you for 200.00 bucks per half hour anyway, because I can't see what you're seeing, unless you mean the kid catching the mom cheating, but even that's a far reach. You're just in denial's all. lol.
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| Re: a comment on Bad habits & tramps by horus8 |
6-Jun-03/5:13 PM |
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This poem is a horrible exhaggeration of how cool I would be, if I could just make it out my front door without biting off two fingers, and staring at everything but where I'm actually going and mumbling incoherantly about things like meteors, bats, and radiation.
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| Re: Watching Time Slip Away by kassanna |
6-Jun-03/5:04 PM |
1. "Slip down the hour glass of life" change down to through.
2. hourglass, is one word.
3. "Each others heart" Each-other's.
4. my suggestion is pull the poem into tight stanzas, use commas and periods, or capitals or lowercase to show sentence and thought seperation. Do not space. Make it like 4 to 6 stanzas. And remove the stuff at the bottom, because, we are already aware that you need guidance. Try not to start your sentences with and or but, and ignore the fact that I do it all the time. Remove the asterick. Make your title a sentence, don't capitalize each word, and there you have it. Oh, try to use words that are a tad bit rarer than the nouns, verbs and adjectives you are using now, check your thesaurus. For instance "
Not enough time
To fill the heart and mind
With memories made too brief"
This could be said like this;
There is never enough time
to ease a heart or mind
as memories displace remembering.
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| Re: A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm |
6-Jun-03/4:45 PM |
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GQT award. Fucking awesome poem, hands down.
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| Re: Jeremi B. Handrinos: Part 2 by wCUNTw |
6-Jun-03/7:39 AM |
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