on Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha
25 May 2004, 6:59 PM
Is this yours, or Lorcas, or both?
on Spitballing by INTRANSIT
25 May 2004, 6:58 PM
Could have ended stronger.
Needs a new last line.
Needs a new last line.
on The truths of war by DeadtotheWorld
25 May 2004, 6:54 PM
Why is this on the best list?
You don't even know the difference between
"our" and "are"? If you're going to have shit grammar, do it
with some imagination could you? liken me does
you asshat.
You don't even know the difference between
"our" and "are"? If you're going to have shit grammar, do it
with some imagination could you? liken me does
you asshat.
replying on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8
9 May 2004, 11:02 PM
Shut up, or me and dark angel will kick your ass wagon and get gravy on your poontain Sasha.
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 10:53 PM
See, unlike you friend, this has nothing to do with me?
Why you would think it helps me cope is exactly what's wrong with your work. I don't necessarily have to include myself in my work, or my message. I approach poetry like a bad novelist. Which allows me to completely get into character without pulling a Silvia Plath down the toilel.
The majority of my work is done from an angle that allows me to not be 'SO' involved, try it.
Why you would think it helps me cope is exactly what's wrong with your work. I don't necessarily have to include myself in my work, or my message. I approach poetry like a bad novelist. Which allows me to completely get into character without pulling a Silvia Plath down the toilel.
The majority of my work is done from an angle that allows me to not be 'SO' involved, try it.
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 4:42 PM
Better?
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 4:42 PM
Let me empty out the garage,
and reminisce.
Let me empty out the closet,
and make a list.
Let me empty out the house,
as promised...
Then let me wrap my mouth
around cold barrel & paint.
and reminisce.
Let me empty out the closet,
and make a list.
Let me empty out the house,
as promised...
Then let me wrap my mouth
around cold barrel & paint.
on Ghosts by unknown^user
9 May 2004, 3:59 PM
You weild a comma like a Mexican.
on This Summers Ablaze by DeadtotheWorld
9 May 2004, 3:54 PM
My advice, get out of Idaho before you're completely retarded.
replying on Barometric pressure & true love (The prince of storms) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
9 May 2004, 10:15 AM
Dude, stop it, you're scaring me.
on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha
4 May 2004, 8:14 PM
O wait I get it, Dick.
on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha
4 May 2004, 8:13 PM
Unreadable smut.
on Funeral of My Childhood by Spindle
4 May 2004, 8:11 PM
'twas me said the bean to Uranus.
on Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee
4 May 2004, 7:53 PM
I'm a hoe.
on Municipal park by richa
29 Apr 2004, 3:20 PM
Are all of your poems about paralyzed acorns?
on I'll Save You The Effort by wwFrasier Allonbyww
29 Apr 2004, 1:47 PM
Swit.
on your worth to me by francis nor capule
29 Apr 2004, 12:49 PM
'imperfect' not unperfect.
on "Joseph, Joseph" by joe-joe
29 Apr 2004, 10:48 AM
Second stanza was great, but like a good burger it's trapped between bad buns.