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"Joseph, Joseph" (Free verse) by joe-joe âJoseph, Josephâ that whispering voice
I hear faintly in echoes as he implores
And follow I may as matter of choice
Those fancies instead I blindly do score.
âJoseph, Josephâ He utters as I rest
Between sweet dreams and incubus
Sounds crossing cold waters to test
Begging for my unmoving trust.
âJoseph, Josephâ he doth gently beseech
In my time of desperate need
This time He hath laid for Him to teach
But Joseph oh Joseph I still do not heed.
Up the ladder:
Love
Down the ladder:
Ghostly Rememberance
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Posted: April 29, 2004 9:45 AM PDT; Last modified: April 29, 2004 9:45 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10149 Comments:
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Bobjim @ 213.122.80.1
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29-Apr-04/10:30 AM
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I like it not. There was no discernible meaning or humour.
Second stanza was great, but like a good burger it's trapped between bad buns.
Horus,
I agree. The buns are not totally bad but there certainly is quite a bit of room for improvement. Suggestions are welcome. Thanks. 200 view(s)
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