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10-Dec-03/11:44 AM |
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I've never seen snow (I've only lived in SF and Puerto Rico in my short life.) This poem makes me want to move to Utah and pee in the snow.
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| Re: She is A Lover Deep Within by Joe-joe |
11-Dec-03/1:13 PM |
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| Re: The Spirit Of Giving by Miggy |
11-Dec-03/1:39 PM |
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| Re: Preserves for the basement (Poe Poetry) by Bachus |
11-Dec-03/1:46 PM |
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| Re: Hurt by PunkyPanda |
11-Dec-03/3:47 PM |
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0_o I'm lost. Ok, so you hurt someone and you feel guilty about it. BUT, the sight of them being happy makes you want to die?
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| Re: Let Go by PunkyPanda |
11-Dec-03/3:54 PM |
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Well this is definitely better than your last piece. I totally know how it feels to want someone so bad even though you are fully aware they could care less. Still, it seems like a rant. Your ellipses is missing a third dot...
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| Re: Without you by Luv2write |
12-Dec-03/10:06 PM |
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I don't think you mention "the light" enough times.
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| Re: diamond of love by crwncka1 |
12-Dec-03/10:07 PM |
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| Re: What I really needed by Shardik |
12-Dec-03/10:10 PM |
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12-Dec-03/10:13 PM |
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I prefer the smell of Lever 2000.
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| Re: Lessons on being a man by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
13-Dec-03/8:15 PM |
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"buying your wife another diamond ring." What the hell does she need another one for!? I know diamonds are a girl's best friend but she should be content already with the wedding ring.
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| Re: Little Bird by Blindpoetry |
21-Dec-03/7:36 PM |
Oh, Little Bird
I don't want to see you dead
A feathery pile of green and white turd
How I'd miss you shitting on my head
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| Re: My friend over there (the Mirror) by reo316 |
23-Dec-03/11:49 PM |
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I really like how you worded your last two lines. Solid work.
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| Re: It's lonely at the top by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
24-Dec-03/11:04 PM |
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ha! what a dork. Not God, you. -8-
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| Re: Weep In Me by blueyes |
29-Dec-03/7:22 PM |
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make sure you weep with a condom on!
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| Re: The Fire of My Mind by RubyDragonKnight |
1-Jan-04/10:55 PM |
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| Re: Belabourin' Jack by middenHeap |
2-Jan-04/1:07 PM |
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Reading this made me cup my balls...I enjoyed it
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2-Jan-04/9:53 PM |
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*groans* The whole world doesn't treat the holiday with disgrace because the whole world does not celebrate Christmas. I think this comes across as a little too preachy. Your message of people needing to acknowledge the holiday's true meaning is important enough to write about. Still, I think it could be done in a better way.
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2-Jan-04/9:59 PM |
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This reads like a bad hallmark card.
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| Re: Offence by Stephen Robins |
10-Feb-04/9:14 PM |
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