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Let Go (Free verse) by PunkyPanda I'm so afraid to wake up and have everything gone.
I don't want to lose more than I've already lost.
How can I get to you when you're so far away?
All I want to do is fuckin' die everytime I cry cuz you can't save me
from the cold..this is getting to fuckin' old!
All I want you to see is you've become a fuckin' part of me and I can't
let go...but you'll never know, and I know you don't give a fuck, I
might as well give it all up..just go..let go of me..and go.
Up the ladder:
Shoe Hole
Down the ladder:
Mother nature's creation (Terza Rima sonnet)
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Posted: December 11, 2003 11:46 AM PST; Last modified: December 11, 2003 11:46 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0672355 Overall Rank: 6650 Comments:
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nothingtoanyone @ 65.125.114.157
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11-Dec-03/11:50 AM
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And what do you Know, another good one lol.
That's about as punk rock as a warm lemonade slurpee.
I appreciate all of your comments...Audrey, Lol. But as far as "Baby Yaga" do I sense sarcasm?
Yes, I don't want you to die. I want you to get naked and cook me a god damn omelette.
Well this is definitely better than your last piece. I totally know how it feels to want someone so bad even though you are fully aware they could care less. Still, it seems like a rant. Your ellipses is missing a third dot...
You need a fuckin' heater, man.
lol. and a kilt with an anti pattern.
Lol...I wrote this one about a guy I was dating who lived in Chicago (I live in AZ duh) so I just woke up one night and wrote it, these things come to me in my sleep...strangest thing :)
i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good
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