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Let Go (Free verse) by PunkyPanda
I'm so afraid to wake up and have everything gone. I don't want to lose more than I've already lost. How can I get to you when you're so far away? All I want to do is fuckin' die everytime I cry cuz you can't save me from the cold..this is getting to fuckin' old! All I want you to see is you've become a fuckin' part of me and I can't let go...but you'll never know, and I know you don't give a fuck, I might as well give it all up..just go..let go of me..and go.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.0672355
Overall Rank: 6649
Posted: December 11, 2003 11:46 AM PST; Last modified: December 11, 2003 11:46 AM PST
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[10] nothingtoanyone @ 65.125.114.157 | 11-Dec-03/11:50 AM | Reply
And what do you Know, another good one lol.
[5] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 | 11-Dec-03/2:39 PM | Reply
That's about as punk rock as a warm lemonade slurpee.
[n/a] PunkyPanda @ 198.81.26.81 | 11-Dec-03/3:00 PM | Reply
I appreciate all of your comments...Audrey, Lol. But as far as "Baby Yaga" do I sense sarcasm?
[5] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 > PunkyPanda | 11-Dec-03/3:28 PM | Reply
Yes, I don't want you to die. I want you to get naked and cook me a god damn omelette.
[6] dragonfly @ 67.192.110.189 | 11-Dec-03/3:54 PM | Reply
Well this is definitely better than your last piece. I totally know how it feels to want someone so bad even though you are fully aware they could care less. Still, it seems like a rant. Your ellipses is missing a third dot...
[5] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.85 | 11-Dec-03/5:15 PM | Reply
You need a fuckin' heater, man.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 12-Dec-03/2:06 AM | Reply
lol. and a kilt with an anti pattern.
[n/a] PunkyPanda @ 65.125.114.157 | 12-Dec-03/10:08 AM | Reply
Lol...I wrote this one about a guy I was dating who lived in Chicago (I live in AZ duh) so I just woke up one night and wrote it, these things come to me in my sleep...strangest thing :)
[6] not_a_philosopher @ 205.188.116.139 | 14-Apr-05/2:34 PM | Reply
i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good
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