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Let Go (Free verse) by PunkyPanda

I'm so afraid to wake up and have everything gone. I don't want to lose more than I've already lost. How can I get to you when you're so far away? All I want to do is fuckin' die everytime I cry cuz you can't save me from the cold..this is getting to fuckin' old! All I want you to see is you've become a fuckin' part of me and I can't let go...but you'll never know, and I know you don't give a fuck, I might as well give it all up..just go..let go of me..and go.

not_a_philosopher 14-Apr-05/2:34 PM
i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good




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