Re: night owl (5) by elementalidad	6-Oct-08/4:53 PM
I know more or less nothing about Japanese poetry, but this is a shining example of how good simplicity can be in poetry. Your others try to be a bit too poetic, whereas this makes the reader do all the work without realising it. Top drawer.
Re: a comment on Rails to Trails by Dovina	6-Oct-08/4:48 PM
I used to cycle to work back in the days when I was a bit less lazy. But then I went to Australia where everywhere is far too far away to make bikes anything other than a comedy, and when I came back all I could do was drive. There are some nice cycle trails over here though, and you don't even have to spill blood for them. And the best part is that you're more or less guaranteed a pub every two miles.
Re: Alice to Slumber by Skamper	6-Oct-08/4:39 PM
lol, fantastic.
Re: a comment on Rails to Trails by Dovina	6-Oct-08/4:37 PM
I've been busy, too busy for writing recently. I'd try picking through all your poetic stresses but it's been a long day. I still think your writing's better when it shies away from the generalisations and concentrates more on something you know a lot about, or can target more easily. Where you at these days?
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	6-Oct-08/4:31 PM
Sort of New Age. Are you a painter?
Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina	6-Oct-08/4:26 PM
I like the fourth stanza, altered a bit. Especially the "servants like me" bit (no comma needed after it), because unlike the rest, which is pretty generalised, it brings the focus down to one point, one place. I don't think it wants the repeated 'to'. You could get away with using 'where' once more there - "...where boys chase rabbits/where more people/clog the freeways". Or something like that.
Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	21-Jul-08/3:27 AM
lol
Re: a comment on We can all be free with our legs by daggatolar	21-Jul-08/3:26 AM
Are you really a hobo?
Re: U.S. Lite by PodPoet	21-Jul-08/3:24 AM
How curious.
Re: About the Broken Glass... by nypoet22	21-Jul-08/3:22 AM
Great. "Is it sticks or bats, or hearts that beat" is a fabulous line. Did you mean to abandon the rhyme scheme with "cracks"?
Re: Cinematic Indulgence by nentwined	21-Jul-08/3:10 AM
How quickly can you recite this? I love the skipping beat. It gives the poem a sort of it-might-be-meaningful-but-who-cares feel, almost childish. Makes me think you're the sort of person who says "dah-ling" to everyone you meet.
Re: a comment on Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze	21-Jul-08/3:06 AM
No.
Re: Post-mortem by jen	23-Jan-08/2:20 AM
I don't like cummings so a comment would be unfair.
Re: a comment on Voice of the World by Dovina	23-Jan-08/2:16 AM
You're saying some most un-Dark Angel-like things. Or at least you're implying some such things. Do people need fear to keep them in check? Yes, actually. It doesn't have to be fear of eternal violence. It's usually just fear of immediate violence, such a clip round the ear for being a little rascal. But when that fear disappears, what substitute is there to maintain some sort of pleasant social behaviour? Here's an example: it makes no sense for a ten-year-old midget to hurl abuse at a six foot four inch 21-year-old. All logic says that it's a terrible idea from the 10-year-old's point of view. So why does he do it? I'm not a particularly religious person. I had all my real hope bludgeoned out of me by your chums in the scientific world. I don't particularly want to murder someone, but then I'm a nice, boring person. And yes, I was brought up with mild religious undertones. Weren't you? Can I give in to the popular media for a moment and ask you about Mr. Newlove's killers? Why don't they seem to have any remorse? I think I've spent the last ten minutes just waffling around your original question. This is why I only got a 2:1.
Re: a comment on Voice of the World by Dovina	22-Jan-08/2:12 AM
So if we got rid of every religious tendency then the whole world would suddenly become all happy joyful?
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	21-Dec-07/3:02 PM
Aside from the punctuation not scanning well at the start (it's the hyphen that threw me) this is excellent.
Re: The Least of These by Dovina	21-Dec-07/2:59 PM
Love the last stanza, and bits here and there also appeal. Stanzas one and two are nice but could be reworded to be a bit more, well, poetic. The sickly kids section is also promising, but I don't really like the word 'kids' in poetry. And I hate seeing life rhymed with strife. It's only a flying visit I've paid, but I have read this a couple of times since it was posted. Hope the Christmas season's treating you well!
Re: On the Swings by Christof	8-Dec-07/4:48 AM
This is utterly wonderful. Why is it buried away?
Re: INTELLIGENCIA by INTRANSIT	8-Dec-07/4:45 AM
The last 6 lines are the best I've seen on poemeranker in months. The grammar Gestapo are going to be calling round about a couple of those apostrophes though.
Re: Day Dream by Jessina	8-Dec-07/4:37 AM
Pretty.