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night owl (5) (Senryu) by elementalidad family asleep
in separate rooms
peace at last
Up the ladder:
Stopped Cold
Down the ladder:
unheeded
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: September 29, 2008 6:41 AM PDT; Last modified: September 29, 2008 6:41 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1897035 Overall Rank: 4739 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Bethy @ 165.154.46.224
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29-Sep-08/10:14 AM
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oh the sweet sound of peace... :)
I know more or less nothing about Japanese poetry, but this is a shining example of how good simplicity can be in poetry. Your others try to be a bit too poetic, whereas this makes the reader do all the work without realising it. Top drawer.
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