DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

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Member since 2001 · Posted 11 Mar 2009 · 3 comments

The world is made up of sounds that express concepts that we pass, one to another; and fears, deeper-rooted than thought. And we think with these concepts, these sounds, to ourselves and out loud; and we fear with them as well. The world is made up of people that express sounds, shared vocabularies--disparate meanings; one note across the world rings a thousand different tales against a thousand different contexts, is hidden in a thousand different scores. The world is made up of pains expressed as sounds, and joys expressed the same; I can hear what you are thinking but my ear may be to blame for the thoughts that I receive from your sounds.

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[n/a] nentwined 11-Mar-09/8:29 PM Reply

I've been poeming a lot since ... last Friday, I think. I hit on a new voice in a few of them, and I'm trying to figure that out--but in the meantime, thoughts seem to be wanting to express themselves in this form. This is a thought, not something that's looking for publication, so it's not hidden for future re-working.

In fact, as I'm listening to some beautiful YouTube mash-ups [[ http://thru-you.com/ ]] by a person named (or calling himself) Kutiman, I'd love to create some sort of dialog out of it.

So: I hereby release the poem and its accompanying audio into the public domain; if you see some promise in either, do with them as thou wilt.

And I'd love to know what you think. :) I'm particularly unhappy with s3--I don't think it says what it needs to, but my thoughts started to falter (and my rhythm, though a part of me hopes that works ;) ). And perhaps I don't explore the metaphor (if it's really a metaphor) enough in the first two stanzas... and the fear is important, but I just touch on it (that was supposed to be the core as much as the "sounds", but it didn't go that way).

[n/a] nentwined › nentwined 11-Mar-09/8:30 PM Reply

er, right--the audio. Linked @ http://kaolinfire.livejournal.com/441148.html

[9] wDaphnew 25-Sep-11/11:55 AM Reply

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