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in this bus terminal of the future (Free verse) by nentwined
there will be anti-grav, VTOL, jet-assist, FTL, teleportation, and inevitable delays.

Up the ladder: No Aegis
Down the ladder: My Guardian Angel

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.875
Weighted score: 5.7732067
Overall Rank: 1746
Posted: June 24, 2008 2:47 PM PDT; Last modified: June 24, 2008 2:47 PM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 208.127.216.214 | 27-Jun-08/10:39 AM | Reply
If an engine won't run, inject some of your own blood into its carburetor. Good try. I think the resumption of SEARCH would make a better try.

As for anti-grav and VTOL, they look like results of the same technology. I don't know what FTL is. The last line is funny
[n/a] nentwined @ 98.148.150.246 > Dovina | 27-Jun-08/2:01 PM | Reply
can has moar blood? :)

VTOL is more just the direction of thrust; anti-grav I hope to be much more spectacular. :) FTL - faster than light (travel). Which teleportation generally qualifies as, but I was grasping. Glad it got a chuckle.

resumption of SEARCH?
[8] Dovina @ 208.127.216.26 > nentwined | 28-Jun-08/10:37 AM | Reply
SEARCH works for me today, STL but it works. Anti-grav is here now, a mere dimple in space-time, just have to think light, less chocolate and all. Cheers.
[8] Dan garcia-Black @ 69.237.237.147 | 30-Jun-08/8:31 AM | Reply
Even better on the 2nd read.
[n/a] nentwined @ 98.148.150.246 > Dan garcia-Black | 2-Jul-08/2:31 AM | Reply
Thanks :D
[8] Skamper @ 123.208.6.33 | 6-Jul-08/4:44 AM | Reply
I like that..change without true progress...

the word inevitable jars a little with me, not sure why
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 68.123.141.188 | 9-Jul-08/10:51 PM | Reply
This should have been labeled as the future manifestation of haiku in retro jetpack theme. Eight.
[8] Ranger @ 81.158.152.41 | 21-Jul-08/3:27 AM | Reply
lol
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 99.239.12.102 | 14-Feb-09/6:00 PM | Reply
This place is dead! Or perhaps hibernating?
[n/a] nentwined @ 98.148.241.139 > Bill Z Bub | 14-Feb-09/9:05 PM | Reply
It definitely goes in cycles. But this one's definitely more of a downer than previous ones.

In the bus terminal of the future... poemranker is the writing on the wall.

I'm thinking of making it iPhone-friendly.

Any thoughts on how to get fresh blood? Just need people reading and commenting and voting... or more typically just commenting and voting ;)
[8] Dovina @ 66.245.196.6 > nentwined | 15-Feb-09/11:40 AM | Reply
True, but iphone wont help, I think. It's still the best constructed poetry site on the internet
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