regarding some deleted poem...	18-Nov-02/5:55 AM
I mailed this to a mixed bag of mates, and if I dont tell you what they think of it, then theirs no point in writing poetry. They all thought it was very very beautiful, you should know its very inspiring, thanks for sharing it, its brilliant
Re: I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird	18-Nov-02/6:07 AM
I think N'sync should sing it, then you pet that ppk out and whack em ! Full marks my psychotic prince
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Nov-02/2:39 AM
I liked it but thought it was missing something, there was no build up to it. also pedistal is pedestal , check line 2 for 'and angel' surely its 'an angel', try and add another stanza.
Re: yellow verse by daniella	19-Nov-02/3:04 AM
At last a limerick !
Re: My love for another. by cleverdevice	19-Nov-02/3:42 AM
Just like I was there, you shouls be proud of this one.
Re: missing you by Goose	19-Nov-02/8:15 AM
i agree with chrisof
Re: Summer Repose by jdsnyd	19-Nov-02/8:17 AM
Nicely Constructed, philosophical, liked the line 'too content in the moment'
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Nov-02/8:19 AM
Enjoyable, but without wanting to sound vacuous, what the f*** has this gotta do with M.B
Re: Sisters in Disquise by confuzdlilgirl	19-Nov-02/8:24 AM
pretty good CLG, but check paragraphs 2/4 for errors as it kills the vibe your trying to emanate
Re: Bastard Of The Bastard by Bachus	19-Nov-02/10:07 AM
Filled with vitriol, and talk about a memorable last line. Can we expect a sequel? nice job
Re: When It's All Over by BUFFY0BSESSED	20-Nov-02/4:53 AM
No offence intended but it goes on a bit and becomes tedious as you keep making the same point, and the point in which your making is not sold poignantly enough for it to move me.
Re: The Trail by ThoughtfulSoul	20-Nov-02/5:41 AM
is this finished? its not a poem and as a piece of literature its woefully uninspiring. Keep on writing though, you can do it
Re: The Trail by ThoughtfulSoul	20-Nov-02/5:41 AM
is this finished? its not a poem and as a piece of literature its woefully uninspiring. Keep on writing though, you can do it
Re: Night-mare by INTRANSIT	21-Nov-02/3:25 AM
This isn't as thought provoking and evocative as Dale, though I compare unfairly, I always find your work interesting and this is good but it needs something more. I feel this is a more emotional voyeuristic effort rather than stright from the heart. It sounds like a middle piece lacking a beginning and an end, you normally set the scene so pictorially and it was only a drag of a cuban rather than the full George Burns. Work on it, give it more oooomphhh. ( vote holded for moment )
Re: Faith by INTRANSIT	21-Nov-02/3:48 AM
Made me think about fragility of our physical self, yet you explained phenomenon as a phenomonon and that makes this an intelligent piece - 8 -
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Nov-02/10:42 AM
Lucio Fulci that Godfather of Gore would be proud you wrote of that scene. To see what dark angels on about there is a clip on this website www.badmovie.org. Have to ten this, and Dark if we bury the hatchet over our previous bitchy argument you can bury it in my face ( As in the scene from friday 13th part 5)
Re: it was red by kiki	21-Nov-02/10:48 AM
Can't believe this has had shit votes, the voting on here is dody at times to say the least, well kiki your not talking bollocks, this is a deep river and i enjoyed the swim. faaaaaaacking 5 ? have an 8
Re: Goodbye by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:15 AM
As my surnames 'owen' I had to support the welsh half of me. You possess a lot of talent Mr Jones, you illustrate literature in to clarity with your style. Maybe our paths will cross again, I would value your opinions/critique on my work. Are you a wales fan? their playing better than England at the moment at soccer
Re: Goodbye by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:23 AM
fix your 1st line 'must' ok?
Re: The Autopsy (as shown on Channel Four) by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:56 AM
trouble is the buckets full of organs. You should be educating yourself on late night channel 5 B movies, you'd see plenty of 'buckets' on that (all botox and no brains)