on some deleted poem
15 Nov 2002, 8:43 AM
Joey,
try and at least be moving, attempt to tell a story and not quote the obvious we can buy from leading card shops on the high street. Try and think of the single most upsetting experience in your life, rip your heart out and smash it on the round table of your fellow Knights.
I want inspiration, I want to inhale your sonnetic energy like George Burns puffing away on a cuban.
Come on man do it do it do it
i have faith
try and at least be moving, attempt to tell a story and not quote the obvious we can buy from leading card shops on the high street. Try and think of the single most upsetting experience in your life, rip your heart out and smash it on the round table of your fellow Knights.
I want inspiration, I want to inhale your sonnetic energy like George Burns puffing away on a cuban.
Come on man do it do it do it
i have faith
on Your Guiding Light by Bonehiss
15 Nov 2002, 8:50 AM
7, the last few lines, but it left me a bit cold
on Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29
15 Nov 2002, 8:57 AM
I'm trying to learn Haiku, I've written a few but at least I've learned from you how to swear nonchalantly.
on Forbidden fruit by GTK
15 Nov 2002, 9:01 AM
Not really my Bacon Sandwich,
You irritate me because i think
you could do so much better, dont refrain from expression its like a dogs ass sniffing its nose, poets are lost but their poems are found.
fuck it I'm cliche crazy today = have a 6 its friday
You irritate me because i think
you could do so much better, dont refrain from expression its like a dogs ass sniffing its nose, poets are lost but their poems are found.
fuck it I'm cliche crazy today = have a 6 its friday
on some deleted poem
15 Nov 2002, 9:12 AM
A Good effort, i can see you really tried to evoke som e sentiment in this but you are guilty of a shocking crime.....
it sounds like a whitney houston song.
it sounds like a whitney houston song.
on some deleted poem
15 Nov 2002, 9:14 AM
and a half
on The heart of self destruction by Roisin
15 Nov 2002, 9:17 AM
'the faceless assassin of her heart' that did it for me - 7
well done indeed and i'm in a bad mood
well done indeed and i'm in a bad mood
on Determination by Birdman42s
15 Nov 2002, 9:20 AM
deserves to be more read
well done man
well done man
on some deleted poem
15 Nov 2002, 9:24 AM
hey gods wife, why do you always get loads of comments but not as many votes? heres a 9 i liked it more the 3rd time reading it.
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 3:06 AM
Excellent, loved it
on I Begged by abbaslittleclingon
18 Nov 2002, 3:12 AM
Have an 8 Its a beautifully written piece loved the tree thing, and the way you told it hit me hard.
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 3:16 AM
Hey wot that was absolutely spiffing Sir Dark !
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 3:22 AM
Wow that whole Kicking the shite out of the clock thing really hit me. The best one I've read of yours so far, have a 10 while i go saw Lady Godivas head off outside (I'm from Coventry) 10 10 10
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 4:40 AM
liked it !
on Broken Glass by Sugarbbybuttrfly
18 Nov 2002, 4:46 AM
Kep hoping for that killer line, add more sarcasm and venom, as a man I'm interested in knowing how the perpertrator affected the perpetrated. It didnt deliver enough as a poem but as a song maybe. *5*
time to relax from being INTRANSIT.
Liked your spikytonguedpoem