| Re: Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT |
15-Nov-02/8:31 AM |
Roll up a rizzla, watch some daytime TV, throw some darts off a tall building then run like s**t, take a chill pill daffodil,
time to relax from being INTRANSIT.
Liked your spikytonguedpoem
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| Re: give by joey |
15-Nov-02/8:36 AM |
This was as wet as a nun watching
Lesbian Swedish mud wrestlers.
Joey come on man you can do better
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| Re: we by joey |
15-Nov-02/8:37 AM |
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Oh God I'm drowning in carrots
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15-Nov-02/8:43 AM |
Joey,
try and at least be moving, attempt to tell a story and not quote the obvious we can buy from leading card shops on the high street. Try and think of the single most upsetting experience in your life, rip your heart out and smash it on the round table of your fellow Knights.
I want inspiration, I want to inhale your sonnetic energy like George Burns puffing away on a cuban.
Come on man do it do it do it
i have faith
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| Re: Your Guiding Light by Bonehiss |
15-Nov-02/8:50 AM |
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7, the last few lines, but it left me a bit cold
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| Re: Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29 |
15-Nov-02/8:57 AM |
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I'm trying to learn Haiku, I've written a few but at least I've learned from you how to swear nonchalantly.
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| Re: Forbidden fruit by GTK |
15-Nov-02/9:01 AM |
Not really my Bacon Sandwich,
You irritate me because i think
you could do so much better, dont refrain from expression its like a dogs ass sniffing its nose, poets are lost but their poems are found.
fuck it I'm cliche crazy today = have a 6 its friday
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15-Nov-02/9:12 AM |
A Good effort, i can see you really tried to evoke som e sentiment in this but you are guilty of a shocking crime.....
it sounds like a whitney houston song.
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15-Nov-02/9:14 AM |
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| Re: The heart of self destruction by Roisin |
15-Nov-02/9:17 AM |
'the faceless assassin of her heart' that did it for me - 7
well done indeed and i'm in a bad mood
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| Re: Thawed by Roisin |
15-Nov-02/9:18 AM |
thanks i enjoyed reading your shit
7 again
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| Re: Determination by Birdman42s |
15-Nov-02/9:20 AM |
deserves to be more read
well done man
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15-Nov-02/9:24 AM |
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hey gods wife, why do you always get loads of comments but not as many votes? heres a 9 i liked it more the 3rd time reading it.
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18-Nov-02/3:06 AM |
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| Re: I Cry by casey |
18-Nov-02/3:08 AM |
Good title, even better with a 2nd read.
nice one !
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| Re: I Begged by abbaslittleclingon |
18-Nov-02/3:12 AM |
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Have an 8 Its a beautifully written piece loved the tree thing, and the way you told it hit me hard.
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18-Nov-02/3:16 AM |
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Hey wot that was absolutely spiffing Sir Dark !
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18-Nov-02/3:22 AM |
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Wow that whole Kicking the shite out of the clock thing really hit me. The best one I've read of yours so far, have a 10 while i go saw Lady Godivas head off outside (I'm from Coventry) 10 10 10
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18-Nov-02/4:40 AM |
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| Re: Broken Glass by Sugarbbybuttrfly |
18-Nov-02/4:46 AM |
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Kep hoping for that killer line, add more sarcasm and venom, as a man I'm interested in knowing how the perpertrator affected the perpetrated. It didnt deliver enough as a poem but as a song maybe. *5*
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