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Bastard Of The Bastard (Free verse) by Bachus
Withered old man a sickly sight Mop the closet floor instead tonight My friends are here, please understand To know your name they would demand So get back into the darkness again dead man Play a game of chess with your hag wife What's this you say, she left today How did she move so bloated, and legs decayed? Did she claw her way right through the wall? Tell me is that where the old ones go? Why do you look at me so strange? I am but a child, I'm not deranged So, go back through that closet door Before I beat your head against the floor Grandpa, listen to my voice Grandma is gone by choice You've talked her silly you murmuring madman You're old She's gone I'm young I've won Fault is vice And vice is fault So get your crippled legs back into the vault

Up the ladder: The Price in December
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.7777777
Weighted score: 5.388889
Overall Rank: 3198
Posted: August 8, 2002 1:04 PM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2002 1:04 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 8-Aug-02/5:21 PM | Reply
I must know more about this vault! Please detail the further exploits of the crippled Oldlings.
[n/a] Venus @ 152.163.197.47 | 8-Aug-02/8:36 PM | Reply
Your imagery is quite lovely, and such wonderfully nasty verse.
[n/a] Bachus @ | 9-Aug-02/1:13 AM | Reply
Sleeping with the fishes. Greedy mermaids with smoke in their eyes.p
[n/a] deleted user @ 65.59.17.248 | 16-Aug-02/4:23 PM | Reply
Bachus - And I'm going to get more rent as the clock toc's in.....now that's funny.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Nov-02/10:07 AM | Reply
Filled with vitriol, and talk about a memorable last line.

Can we expect a sequel?

nice job
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