Re: Smurfette by Bachus	22-Nov-02/4:06 AM
Was she KGB or CIA? How about the space smurf he was the coolest, you could put that whole x files spin on it?
Re: Not God's Wife, Just a Girl by w~* ATHENA *~w	22-Nov-02/4:43 AM
Loved the last stanza, how can this be criticized i wonder?
Re: the devil in you by ciantu	22-Nov-02/4:48 AM
Jim eats in Korean restaurants, atone the bastard after your dog goes for a piss dress it in his underwear while he sleeps, hes just jealous he cant lick his own bollocks and noone else wants too either well done
Re: Just Die Already... by loneshadow29	22-Nov-02/5:19 AM
Reminded me of Jason Vorhees, I appreciate violence after caffeine.
Re: Missing You by psychedelic	22-Nov-02/5:35 AM
This is beautiful, and the last line is perfection.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Nov-02/5:45 AM
Very lascivious, this could have been romantic until the last 2 lines but it cracked me up, A cool read indeed.
Re: Held by <~>	22-Nov-02/5:50 AM
you make the complex seem clear, and pick the scabs of human suffering like undressing a rose, I learned a lot from this, our styles are similar, yet your more diverse, you have a lot to offer this site.
Re: Held by <~>	22-Nov-02/5:52 AM
whoever rated this a zero really has no fucking taste whoever did it read zzinnia's 'Before Coffee' then take the Greyhound Bus going to Planet Fuckoff
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Nov-02/5:56 AM
Is this about the film Birdy?
Re: Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird	22-Nov-02/5:58 AM
even though the sound of it may seem quite atrocious
Re: Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird	22-Nov-02/6:01 AM
How many dicks do you think shes rehearsed with? I reckon she drinks from the furry cup
Re: Slow Dance by jdsnyd	22-Nov-02/6:13 AM
this is a seminal piece of work, some wonderfully constructed stanzas and it lifed off right from the start. I want more info on this story i'm at work and cant concentrate please give me the story of this if you can? (i only have chance to read/submit poems at work as i have no computer at home
Re: Parking Lot by uncannydanny	22-Nov-02/6:17 AM
its a good yarn but seperate the lines more, this needs to flow clearer, its a stuttered read, otherwise I enjoyed it.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Nov-02/6:23 AM
I read this on the underground and a man in bifocals asked if it was mine, i said yes, then he asked me what it was about so i told the pontificating asswipe in the pin stripe suit to fix his flies, I've arrived at Kings Cross : so there you go you travelled on the tube, and some nosey Banker with flaky skin liked your poem: i'm only giving you an 8 for making me smell his bad breath !
Re: Everyone loves me- not. by UAFANTHORPEY	22-Nov-02/6:25 AM
Giant Haystacks? Big Daddy?
Re: en el tiempo que era nina by daniella	22-Nov-02/6:29 AM
Spain obviously inspired you, I want to read this in English i feel like I'm drunk in a karaoke bar in benidorm and i'm singing along to something i have no knowledge of, so please re-submit it-
Re: When Heaven Is Hell by Brennan	22-Nov-02/6:33 AM
lines 3/4 stanza 2 screw this up, if you took all the best lines and condensed it, it could be quite a good poem. As it stands it dont clog my throat
Re: A Well Worth Wait by savannah	22-Nov-02/6:34 AM
Oh dear - you can do better, heart is the right place, but the poems in the wrong place.
Re: Dreaming by TripleHGurl	22-Nov-02/6:36 AM
I've been through the clouds too. thanks to jack daniels
Re: Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie	22-Nov-02/8:05 AM
A powerful statement indeed, its well written and you need to name more specifically those responsible for this atrocity,(e.g the government, the husbands, local authorities, the u.n.) because the subject is sensitive and to some an outsider viewing the insider may provoke racial accusations. I think however you've researched the facts, the last line could be more affecting, maybe 'Vishnu's Infasdel' would go better for the last line. Bottom line I liked it, (7)