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22-Nov-02/8:13 AM |
Its good, but your title is pompous, mutual respect of poetry/haiku's whether their a masterpiece or not should be displayed.
I await your backlash
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22-Nov-02/8:31 AM |
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| Re: A load of bollocks - literally!!! by Yardbird |
22-Nov-02/8:33 AM |
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at least it wasn't a sock
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| Re: Come Night time by anitawit |
22-Nov-02/8:59 AM |
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You seem to have been inspired and it shows, I was wondering if the little pinpoints of light were the eyes of a dormouse about to be slaughtered in the matrix?
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| Re: The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit |
22-Nov-02/9:02 AM |
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This is really good but its very similar to 'Come Nightime' I think you should remove one and enter one of them later, different beasts with the same growl.
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| Re: Beginning or End? by xdarkxangelx24 |
22-Nov-02/9:06 AM |
I think its the end !
For your keyboard that is, for Xmas I will buy you an enter button
and a spring
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22-Nov-02/9:17 AM |
This has made me think for some reason of those creepy porcelain dolls with glass oval eyes.
Explain Tintageles the shadow of her porcelain heart theirs so many theories going on about that line in my head but i havent been able to connect them yet?
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22-Nov-02/9:36 AM |
This is up there with 'Holmganga', and reading your work is a requiem of literary pleasure, you are truly talented and you should take your work further.
O.B. Wan has taught you well.
I didnt know Diana was latin for moon, and Endymion was a beautiful young man loved by the moon. so I guess a title for your poem could be Endymions lover or 'Interlunium' (change of moon)
Anyway 10/10 most of your poems blow me away.
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| Re: The Smurf Village by Bachus |
23-Nov-02/2:02 AM |
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This is the important one, the sinister paradise of the smurfs, its about to kick off - bigtime in smurfopia
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23-Nov-02/2:05 AM |
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I think obliterated, or decimated are harder words for a tradgedy.
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23-Nov-02/4:46 AM |
Father not Farther and I find the ending totally incomprehensible.
Whats the message in this ?
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23-Nov-02/5:08 AM |
Everytime I piss myself laughing at your put downs, but they are addictive and like a trappist monk secretly palming his cock i must give myself 100 lashes of punishment for these taboo pleasures that you share with us. This is fetishistic scorn, and as like a panto villain people love to hate you because you wear your ego like a Milliners panama.
In short I embrace this as a fine fine work.
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23-Nov-02/5:14 AM |
0207 389 2233 call this number their the best in the land.
I have named a laughter line after you, you crease me up (literally)
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23-Nov-02/5:17 AM |
Dammit man ! thats where my magic wand is
HAAAAArrrrrryyyyy
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| Re: My world Of Emptiness by abbaslittleclingon |
25-Nov-02/1:15 AM |
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not bad, 1st line definitely doesnt sound right, check the grammar ok?
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| Re: Are We Losing Those Things We Hold Dear by abbaslittleclingon |
25-Nov-02/1:17 AM |
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You could have carried this on to hit home your message harder. however I liked it, some nice phrases a.l.c
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25-Nov-02/1:19 AM |
The 2nd stanza is very good, ment is mis spelled.
oved the line about the hiding smile it hit me.
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| Re: Wave to the starving children Miss Denmark. by horus8 |
25-Nov-02/1:38 AM |
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| Re: Small Town Snow by OneFingerAnswer |
25-Nov-02/1:42 AM |
Some of this was like a drive through Twin Peaks.
A Damn fine cherry pie ma'm -7-
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25-Nov-02/8:39 AM |
I miss Arnie too, if he read this we'd be missing you.
I would terminate this poem, you know you can do better.
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