on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie
26 Nov 2002, 3:52 AM
So they pissed you off huh?
This IS a confounding and impressive piece, well done -8-
This IS a confounding and impressive piece, well done -8-
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 4:00 AM
here a 7 for being so cult about the occult
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 4:23 AM
Fate is cruel ! Nelson now has thousands of Pidgeons shitting on his arms (oops I mean arm)
I liked this -7-
I liked this -7-
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 4:28 AM
This was like fucking the ice queen from narnia (Cool as a fuck) so take this fat lady and give her a hug *8* BINGO.
on Maliced flame by T'ien
26 Nov 2002, 4:31 AM
Not a bad 'ad break' read *6*
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 4:36 AM
Bollocks to her age let it go !
this poem is timeless, but Ms Calvetti (sounds like a tennis player) if you are lying about your age Bachus will get the secret agent smurf to find out
this poem is timeless, but Ms Calvetti (sounds like a tennis player) if you are lying about your age Bachus will get the secret agent smurf to find out
on Maria's ways on how to deal with puberty! by little_angel_maria
26 Nov 2002, 5:20 AM
Buy A Remington
on Another Chance by Bonehiss
26 Nov 2002, 5:40 AM
I always find it difficult to rate your work as your obviously a hopeless romantic, who writes unchallenging, simple writings. I'm giving you a 6 on this because their is a purity to your work. However I have to criticize you on one aspect and that is the lack of originality in your work, it is a very basic 'greeting card' style with little fibre and alluring qualities.
Fair play to you though, none of us here are Hemingway at the moment, just lose yourself more in your imagination and you'll find more satisfaction in your creativity.
Fair play to you though, none of us here are Hemingway at the moment, just lose yourself more in your imagination and you'll find more satisfaction in your creativity.
on What's the Point of Love? by loneshadow29
26 Nov 2002, 5:46 AM
The point of love is the 'falling' as it grounds you.
Love is A heroic loser seeded within the pounding pastures of our crimson core.
(at least you got me inspired)
Love is A heroic loser seeded within the pounding pastures of our crimson core.
(at least you got me inspired)
on The Abyss of myself by ciantu
26 Nov 2002, 5:57 AM
I've been saying this shit for years.
Every now and then i read something on this site and it restores my faith in the human condition, you sir are ahead of your time with this poem, stanza 2 is right their kicking like a mule. *9*
Every now and then i read something on this site and it restores my faith in the human condition, you sir are ahead of your time with this poem, stanza 2 is right their kicking like a mule. *9*
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 8:19 AM
I never thought Whores slept.
A cheeky 7 for kicking the strumpet and cracking me up
A cheeky 7 for kicking the strumpet and cracking me up
on Maliced flame by T'ien
26 Nov 2002, 8:21 AM
Your a nutter, nice title !
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on Lloyd Street Interlude by jdsnyd
26 Nov 2002, 8:51 AM
This deserves more than a rush read so I'm taking this puppy and taking it for a walk inside my head.
I'm interested in this give me some leads???????
I'm interested in this give me some leads???????
on two poles are better than one by <~>
26 Nov 2002, 9:20 AM
not sure about the end, i can tell this is personal, made me think of feelings locked in a chrysalis, but the ending needed the butterfly and you left me cocooned in your confusion. As a thinker i get lost in whats there, whats not there and could be there.
Heres a 7 for screwing my head up, and giving me an idea for the shitty bus ride ahead of me !
Heres a 7 for screwing my head up, and giving me an idea for the shitty bus ride ahead of me !
on The Epitaph by vulcan
26 Nov 2002, 9:38 AM
Vulcan !
This could be really good and I see you've re edited it. But....its still flawed check line 8, change the opening of line 10,
take your time I f****g love beginning and end but the aforementioned's gotta get sorted.
This could be really good and I see you've re edited it. But....its still flawed check line 8, change the opening of line 10,
take your time I f****g love beginning and end but the aforementioned's gotta get sorted.
Pull up a chair, put your feet up, bite the end off a cuban and listen up !
I want to read your work BUT as i am reading it my flows interupted by crap spelling and i have to start again - NOT FAIR MAN ! I know some people on here get fucked off with being told they havent spelled this or that right but as poets in our own ego masichistical ways we are striving perfectionists so as i said change it and throw you my vote [[[thanks///
I want to read your work BUT as i am reading it my flows interupted by crap spelling and i have to start again - NOT FAIR MAN ! I know some people on here get fucked off with being told they havent spelled this or that right but as poets in our own ego masichistical ways we are striving perfectionists so as i said change it and throw you my vote [[[thanks///
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 9:45 AM
A caviar of fish working class meets royalty.
She finished with me and looking back who could blame her?