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two poles are better than one (Lyric) by <~> I try to stay mindful
not sure that I can
I'm feeling a pull
demand, demand
caution's the watchword
moderation, the game
everything now measured
and properly named
tight in this track
and keeping score
I have a knack
for knowing more
I'm seeing things
and keeping silent
I answer questions
with a smile, and
a lowered brow,
a tilted stare
ask another
I don't care
no pleasing others
no getting involved
no riddle answered
no problem solved
I'm sleeping less
and thinking more
I am clearer,
I am sure
the others miss
the easy truths
heavy souls,
with much to lose
I'm purifying
cleansing deep
eating raw
avoiding meat
drinking
everything in drams
wary of
adulterants
of slipping away
I won't be stopped
I need a change
one that's abrupt
I knew it was coming
sorry you didn't
so don't try to help me
it's none of your business
I know what I'm doing
I've been here before
all of this pressure
too much to ignore
change is positive,
change is good,
now back the fuck off
I'm in a mood...
Up the ladder:
Another Day
Down the ladder:
There is no Happy Hour in Bakersfield, Ca.
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.230769
Posted: November 26, 2002 9:01 AM PST; Last modified: November 27, 2002 7:37 AM PSTWeighted score: 6.630823 Overall Rank: 577 Comments:
This was wonderful
end with "fine" or "be", probably "be" is stronger or maybe, and then we'll see (as an added line) ah fuckit...it just left me a little wet in the vagina (blue balled) but mayhaps was the point 8.
this is amazing...until the last two stanzas. i think your ire got the better of you and you let the words get away from you a little. knowing you, you probably did it on purpose and i'm missing the point.
clarify please--is the first part not angry? what tone do you see, and where does it weaken?
the first part is angry, but it's more of a controlled anger, like that released on Poland back in '39. it weakens with the line "it won't be stopped." something about the timing of the rest is thrown off by this line and it doesn't fully recover (in my opinion).
just like poland. hmmm. i wonder if my czechoslovakian hertiage influenced me subliminally...
i think it was me influenced by your heritage
but, it's not about poland. it's about being bipolar.
(no, it's not about being bi in poland either.)
LMAO.......WHAT THE ???.......YEAH WELL....YOU ASK IF "I" WATCH OPRAH......*ROLLING EYES*.....LOOK WITHIN YOUR MESSED UP PILE OF WORDS BEFORE YOU JUDGE OTHERS....AND BESIDES.....I AM POSITIVE THAT NOBODY'S FEELINGS CAN BE JUDGED,BUT IF YOU WANT TO START A TREND....THEN HEY IM FROM THE LAND WHERE PETS DONT NEED SHRINKS.....LETS GO LMAO...YOU SICK PUPPY!!! IF YOUR COMMENTS MADE ANY SENSE.....I'D BE HAPPY TO TAKE THEM IN :)I VOTE ONE FOR......UMMMMMMM........WELL COZ I'M NICE......
i'm sorry, but i think you miss the point. i was looking within, and that is where this 'messed up pile of words' came from. i don't believe i was judging anybody's feelings; i am not interested in trends. as far as my comments not making sense--did you think about them at all? i mean to provoke thought when i comment on a poem. if you can find no sense in them, do not lay it on me. as for the one you gave me because you are 'nice', i fail to see the logic behind that gesture.
welcome to the site. enjoy your stay.
This is great. I think the last stanza is perfect
heres an ending i think rocks !
CHANGE I SPOSITIVE, CHANGE IS GOOD, NOW BACK THE FUCK OFF, YOUR BOILING MY BLOOD, YOUR NAILING ME DOWN, PUTTING THORNS IN MY CROWN, WATCH ME BLEED SLOWLY, YOUR LOVE IS DISEASE, YOUR LOVE IS UNHOLY, I CURSE THE DAY YOU'D EVER SHOWN ME, LOVE..........? got possessed for a minute their
yep. that's the one.
I like it. From beginning to end.
Excellently vocalized emotion. Enjoy your change.
thoroughly good.
Megadeths' "sweating bullets" comes to mind.
The last stanza's quite simple, which I think is rare for you. Perhaps everyones expecting you to be all business, and it's casual friday. It is a bit simple, but why not? I don't know, but I think if this stanza had been penned by some other, I would like it less. maybe it's just that I never get moody like that...
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Heres a 7 for screwing my head up, and giving me an idea for the shitty bus ride ahead of me !