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two poles are better than one (Lyric) by <~>

I try to stay mindful not sure that I can I'm feeling a pull demand, demand caution's the watchword moderation, the game everything now measured and properly named tight in this track and keeping score I have a knack for knowing more I'm seeing things and keeping silent I answer questions with a smile, and a lowered brow, a tilted stare ask another I don't care no pleasing others no getting involved no riddle answered no problem solved I'm sleeping less and thinking more I am clearer, I am sure the others miss the easy truths heavy souls, with much to lose I'm purifying cleansing deep eating raw avoiding meat drinking everything in drams wary of adulterants of slipping away I won't be stopped I need a change one that's abrupt I knew it was coming sorry you didn't so don't try to help me it's none of your business I know what I'm doing I've been here before all of this pressure too much to ignore change is positive, change is good, now back the fuck off I'm in a mood...

Caducus 26-Nov-02/9:20 AM
not sure about the end, i can tell this is personal, made me think of feelings locked in a chrysalis, but the ending needed the butterfly and you left me cocooned in your confusion. As a thinker i get lost in whats there, whats not there and could be there.
Heres a 7 for screwing my head up, and giving me an idea for the shitty bus ride ahead of me !




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